This is my rice perspective essay, I completely forgot to go over it. Help me any harsh comments are welcome. Also tell me if the conclusion actually matches the essay. Does it flow?
"I am the eagle."
"I am the honey-bee."
My brother, four, and I, seven years old, proudly exclaimed what we had chosen to represent ourselves in a game in which we identified ourselves with certain plants, animals or objects; a game recently invented by us during a road tour. Initially, these analogies were picked on the whether or not we liked something, in other words, based on the prejudices we had towards an object that we saw. Overtime, the game expanded in depth and began to include all the objects that we knew of, not just the ones we saw.
As our childhood progressed, the game that was only played during road trips became an important component of our daily routines in addition to growing in depth and meaning. Now, our choices are not based upon prejudices but rather on comparisons between the life experiences of the objects and our own selves. Today, when I identify myself as an object, I relate to the personal traits, habits, and the trials and tribulations faced by this object. I then find inspiration to find solutions to my problems based on the way the object struggles and survives. From the painting abstract concept, to getting rid of the writer's block, to playing basketball, the small actions of creatures are my inspiration. Thus, this game has evolved into my perspective, shaping my view of the world. Thus, during a day, I enjoy being several different creatures and objects, comparing and learning from them.
In the morning, I am the eagle who wakes up early when the first warm ray of the sun breaks through the horizon. Like the eagle, I am full of ambition and always ready for a new, enriching day.
I am the curious little ant, a compact creature, yet full of questions about the world around it. From, digging deep into the ground and climbing trees to going on adventures like volcano climbing, I gather real life experiences to question and explore the world around me.
During sports, I am an ostrich, a bird that lacks the talent to fly and be light weight, the distinguishing characteristics among the birds. Similarly, I am, I must admit, not the skilled sportsman that my siblings are gifted to be. Instead of regretting our shortcomings, however, we both make up for our lack of talent, with spirit and hard work.
I am an umbrella that spreads in the rains as well as the sun to embrace the challenges and the opportunities that life has to offer. Similarly, I always try to stretch myself to the limits while enjoying life. However, like the umbrella, I shelter my base support, my values -integrity, honesty and hard work.
When it comes to responsibility, I am like the wood pecker that is persistent and continues to bang its head until the job is finished. This persistence is what drives me through endless nights of doing Pre-Calculus problems.
Of course, my personality will never be complete without mentioning creativity and versatility. In this aspect, I compare myself to a piece of paper. The versatility seen in the uses of this product parallels my own diverse interests. Painting abstract art and Arabic calligraphy, origami, chess, astronomy, paleontology, as well as learning new languages are few of my interests and hobbies that I cherish the most.
In group projects, I am like the water. Its characteristic affinity towards its kin molecules is what instigates in me a passion to work together with others in the group. Likewise, I am always open to new ideas, just like the universal solubility demonstrated by the water molecule.
And last but not the least, I am a flu virus, constantly adapting to fit my changing environment. Like the virus, I am always at work to improve and add upon my existing knowledge in addition to learning new one.
Thus, I try to integrate life in to my own life. By appreciating the actions, purpose, and significance of the small, yet important entities that exist in our world, I try to find inspiration to fight challenges. To Rice, I will contribute the perspective to learn and adapt from others experiences not only to my own.
Hello Mr. Gull. Well done. I had fun reading this essay because I can relate to your thoughts. We all have facades we hide and present according to your feelings and surroundings. I exactly know this feeling. Nevertheless, while your introduction sets the theme of you and your brother playing a simple game, I expected an organized story, but the rest were unorganized and all over the place.
For example, you've stated 8 types of personalities you have. That's a good thing, you are trying to explain what you are and how you differ according to various situations. Yet, while you explained different situations, the pattern is all the same.
"I am 'something' when I am ___. I do this, I do that. I feel this." there is no change... This is really just my opinion but I think your essay would be more fun to read if you applied the fact that you changed here. For example, you could say that you were like a prideful lion when playing basketball, proud and associated with your athletic siblings. (Since lions always hunt in packs) but after playing you realized that you were just an ostrich, perhaps even one of the preys. Add some change, not just diversity to what you adapt, but how, why, and the realization for your adaptation.
As for your conclusion, I noticed how you don't have a resolution. If your resolution, (reason), to apply to Rice is just because you want to experience and meet others, I'm sorry but anyone can do that without going to universities. People can meet others and experience different feelings at a party, club, sport game, I don't see a necessity why you have to go to Rice. The question you should be asking yourself is WHY? WHY do you want to go to Rice?
Hope this helps
