Prose-Choose an issue of importance to you-the issue could be personal, school related, local, or international in scope-and write an essay in which you explain the significance of that issue to yourself, your family, your community, or your generation.
I'm writing my essay on how if people don't travel and only stay where they grew up they can become racist and ignorant of other people and their cultures. I am having trouble finishing it up so I was wondering if anyone had any suggestions.
Also this is on my phone so if it looks wierd that is why.
Many people live their whole lives in one place. Never traversing more than thirty miles from their parents. They have the same group of friends their entire life and avoid change like it's the plague. I believe a human can not grow intellectually in this narrow minded environment.
While physically they mature their never progresses from a young teenager's ignorant and racist mind. Their perception of other cultures is distorted as a result of Hollywood movies and TV shows such as South Park. If they were by chance to meet someone from a different county they would be quite astounded in realizing every single stereotype was date and they would find a person similar to his or her self.
My phone tried to finish a word for me the word date should be false in the last line also in the first sentence second paragraph mind should be after their.
They have the same group of friends their entire life and avoid change like it's the plague. I believe a human can not grow intellectually in this narrow minded environment. You are over-generalizing, it comes across as a little harsh. Of course a person can grow on an intellectual level, but what they may be lacking is SOCIAL intelligence. You could mention how social intelligence is every bit as important as book smarts.
Their perception of other cultures is distorted as a result of Hollywood movies and TV shows such as South Park. This is a good point, expand on how the media perpetuates racism and cultural stereotypes.
You are off to a good start, just try not to sound so judgmental. Also, try to connect your story to the "big picture."
Many people live their whole lives in one place, never traversing more than thirty miles from their parents.
They have the same group of friends their entire lives, and avoid change like it's the plague.
I believe a humans can not grow intellectually in such a narrow minded environment.---What would make it a narrow minded environment? I don't think 'narrow minded' is what you want to say here. How about culturally unaware, something like that?
While physically they mature, they never progresses from a young teenager's ignorant and racist mind.---Wouldn't this only be the case if their parents are ignorant and racist?
If they were by chance to meet someone from a different country they would be quite astounded in realizing every single stereotype was false and they would find a person similar to his or her self.
I think you might be stereotyping people who do not travel far from home! It is possible to stay in one place and still be culturally aware and not ignorant or racist! I know what you're saying, it just needs some clarification and maybe a few more examples besides South Park!
Good luck in school and have fun!
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Thanks a lot guys, you gave me a lot to think about!
