In 250 words or less, provide an example of when your point of view differed from a teacher or employer during an evaluation of your performance. How did you handle the situation?
While in art class, sketchbooks were due once a week. One of the assignments was to draw a "your choice". This meant anything of your choosing. This week I chose a beautiful picture of a nude women crying from torso up. I finished the drawing and turned it in thinking what I had done would surely please my teacher. I was wrong. I was given my drawing back receiving an "F". I confronted my teacher after class about my grade. She assured me the drawing was very good and wished she could have given me an "A", but decided since the exposed breasts were inappropriate that it did not deserve the praise of being given points. I always try to understand others point of view before questioning them, but I was not understanding this. She then gave me the opportunity to redo the drawing, but this time covering the breasts. I thought of course so I wouldn't fail the assignment, but then realized by covering the breasts I would be destroying the beauty of it. The nude figure showed an exposed expression that clothes would have covered. I then thanked her for the opportunity, but respectfully turned down the offer and accepted the "F". I love hearing criticism, whether it is good or bad, but in the end I will always stay true to my own vision and myself. That is just who I am.
"I finished the drawing and turned it in thinking what I had done would surely please my teacher. I was wrong"
After I finished drawing and showed to my teacher for pleasing her; I turned out to be wrong.
"She assured me the drawing was very good and wished she could have given me an "A", but decided since the exposed breasts were inappropriate that it did not deserve the praise of being given points."
She assured me that my drawing was excellent and wished to bestow the highest level of score; but, the drawing was inappropriate since it exposed the breasts and as a result, graded it low.
You seem to have a low level of vocabulary
There are a lot of grammatical errors: Sentence structure, Punctuation, Paragraphing and many more.
Overall the essay does not flow from top to bottom and requires a lot of improvements.
- ....sketchbooks were due onceevery a week.
- This meant anything of your choosingyou choose .
- ...of a nude womenwoman crying from torso up.
- ...but I was not understandinggrasp this.
- ...I thought of course so I wouldn't fail the assignmentwon't fail ,
- but then I realized by covering the...
- ...buthowever in the end I will always..
Well, there's nothing wrong with being true to yourself and it's the best thing you can give yourself, however, as an artist you need to respect and follow the theme as instructed, this goes along with the respect you give to your mentor. Nudity, for somebody like you is art, for others it may mean something else, different people, different views and absolutely different appreciation towards different arts. On the other hand, the essay you have speaks for itself and it's well written.
