How have your past circumstances and experiences (such as your upbringing, community, and/or activities) impacted who you are, your future goals, and your choice of major?
All my desire to learn finace in the University started from a simple idea. When I was about five years old, my mother, an university teacher who taught P.E., first got to know the sport yoga and an idea just emerged. Having realized that the knowledge about yoga was too limited in the city we lived, my mother took me to other city for pursuing yoga's studies. Soon we returned to my home, mother decided to open the first yoga club. Although very little money mother had that time, a room she rent and the knowledge she learnt were enough for her to start the business. Times wore on, she changed the place, opened several new clubs and closed down some when the business was at the low ebb. When her business gradually became stable (she also added beauty salon to her business)and I was no longer a navie child, she asked me to work in the yoga club.
I accepted with alacrity because I would have my first job in my life. I imagined I would put on the professional suit and assign tasks to the staffs. However, the fact was that my mother asked me to do the cleaning from the beginning. I was upset and didn't understand my mother would have asked her daughter to do the manual labour. But I wasn't shrink from this job, I worked harder and also learnt to observe---the behavior of the receptionists, accountant and my mother because she is so excel in communicating with people. Few weeks later, I was promoted to a receptionist. After taught about information about the products and courses of yoga, I began to work. Though felt little nervous when I received my first guest, the observation I had done worked. I couldn't describe how strong the sense of accomplishment when the guests and staffs approved my confidence and work. But my ambition was not reached. I read books about communication with the potential customers and management, trying to figure out better ways to run the business. Some ways I provided to my mother worked but a lot of didn't. I knew that I need more knowledge of fiance to realize my ambition---help the yoga club become a big, steablized and chain company. Not only prosper her business but also let more people know that a healthy way of keeping themselves beautiful, young, and vital.
Don't forget to mention how your experience working relates to your future goals. It would be appropriate to mention how the skills you learned working there will help you in school. Nice essay, it does have some grammar issues, though.
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