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'My AA degree' - Vires, Artes, Mores - these principals have been emulated in my life.


rmoffatt2010 2 / 1  
Sep 29, 2009   #1
Florida State University is founded on the principals of "Vires, Artes, Mores" or "Strength, Skill, Character". Through self evaluation, I've recognized how these principals have been emulated in my life.

Vires, strength, can be physical or mental. While lacking physical strength, I make up for it intellectually. My first two years of high school I took honors courses followed by my final two years enrolled in dual enrollment courses at Daytona State College. Due to this decision I will be able to graduate from high school with my AA degree. Performing well and at an advanced level in school has always been important to me. However, my greatest strength is my determination. I will not quit despite the odds and will continue to persevere until the job gets done. Through all of these, I have been instilled with all the qualities needed to succeed.

Artes is about arts, skills, and crafts. This principle involves one of my favorite things: singing. Ever since I was young, I have been singing in my church and have since then sang in competitions. I sing in a praise band, praise team, youth and adult choirs, and a girl's ensemble. Singing has taught me a great deal of dedication and self-discipline. It has also given me a passion for music and a respect for the art. Singing is my means of expression- after a while it becomes therapeutic. I believe there is no better way to reach the world than through something that you have a passion for; it will come naturally.

The greatest principle of these I believe is Mores. Abraham Lincoln once said, "Reputation is the shadow. Character is the tree." Character is not defined by personality, race, or relationships. Character is integrity; it is doing the right thing when no one else thinks it is right. It means being responsible when no one else is looking. Simply, it is an evaluation of someone's moral qualities. A big part of my life is my family, as they have instilled into me values and attitudes that will lay the foundation to success. They are my support and my refuge. My family has been influential in developing my character into a good representation of both them and myself. My family has enriched me with Christian values and traditions that I will carry with me for the rest of my life. They have taught me to be confident in who I am as a person and to never forget who I am and where I come from.

Florida State University is a school of ethics, forthrightness, academic and athletic excellence. It is a school that has been based on "Vires, Artes, Mores" where students embody the values of strength, skill and character. I believe I too hold true to such values and would love nothing more than to call myself a Florida State Seminole.
EF_Sean 6 / 3,491  
Sep 30, 2009   #2
"Florida State University is founded on the principals of "Vires, Artes, Mores" or "Strength, Skill, Character". Through self evaluation, I've recognized how these principals have been emulated in my life. "

"Vires is otherwise known as strength. " You don't need to define these terms. They are already defined for you in the prompt.

While lacking physical strength, it is made up for intellectually

What is the "it" that lacks physical strength?

"Artes is about arts, skill and craft. "

Okay, you need to go through and replace most of the weak verbs you use now, such as various form of "to be" ("is," "are," "was," "were") with stronger ones.
katurday 3 / 6  
Sep 30, 2009   #3
While lacking physical strength, it is made up I make up for it intellectually.

"My first two years of high school, I took honors courses followed by my final two year enrolled in dual enrollment courses at Daytona State College."

Maybe word it like this:

I started off my high school career with honors classes and I continue to challenge myself through enrollment in courses at Daytona State College.
patchell5107 4 / 8  
Sep 30, 2009   #4
I agree don't define the terms. Be different.


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