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(500 words maximum) The University of Colorado Boulder's Flagship 2030 strategic plan promotes exceptional teaching, research, scholarship, creative works, and service distinguishing us as a premier university. We strive to foster a diverse and inclusive community for all that engages each member in opportunities for academic excellence, leadership, and a deeper understanding of the world in which we live. Given the statement above, how do you think you could enrich our diverse and inclusive community and what are your hopes for your college experience?
Essay:
There have been many events that have impacted my life, however, there is one event that is a constant reminder that lingers in my mind and spirit, even now. While in the Air Force, I held the rank of Senior Airman, in a response team with a 3,000 mile reaction radius in Germany. My job was to recover a base from a full spectrum of physical threat events including major accidents, natural disasters, weapons of mass destruction, and wartime attacks. I worked with a close knit unit which trained daily. Our training taught us to expect the unexpected but what I learned stretched beyond. For this was not just a job or responsibility; it was our passion. The fellow men and women I had the pleasure of spending many years with overseas came from all aspects of life which culminated into a melting pot of diversity in the workplace. My experiences through the military will bring CU Boulder campus both leadership and diversity; While my hope, is to garner an education that excels me to my utmost potential.
I remember the day I changed inside forever. It was 3:30am, or 'O Dark thirty' as we called it, and it was supposed to be a day of training like any other. The multitude of time in training came to fruition in the early hours. "A C-130 aircraft engine had burst into flames and it was coming in hot." explained my superior. "Could this be really happening?", I asked myself replaying his words over and over in my mind. Fueled by adrenaline we hustled into high speed, we grabbed our response gear and sprinted to the trucks so fast that my heart felt like the pounding would burst through my chest. We raced as if it were our own family in danger. The blaring sirens silenced all ambient noise until I heard only a high-pitched ringing. On the way to the incident my sweaty palms clutched my gas mask as I gazed around at whom I had called, my brothers and sisters. This was it. It was really happening. Reality set in. I was scared but the familiar voices of my fellow Airmen around me became my comfort in that dark place. For the first time I realized how much of a family I really had. We were people from various countries, races, and religions, but in reality we were the same. We respected each others' differences and through that were able to attain an unspoken camaraderie. We ate together, fought together and drank together, but for the first time while saving the crew we truly appreciated each other, and ultimately called each other family despite our differences. That moment changed my life forever as I realized when you broaden your horizons the scope of possibility for humanity is exponentially enriched. My hope is to take this ideal and show others that same love while working hard for the best education that allows me to reach beyond the unexpected.
Our training taught us to expect the unexpected, but what I learned stretched far beyond.
For this was not just a job or responsibility; it was our passion. The fellow men and women I had the pleasure of spending many years with overseas came from all aspects of life which culminated into a melting pot of diversity in the workplace. My experiences through the military will bring CU Boulder campus both leadership and diversity, w hile my hope, ---no comma here --- is to garner an education that excelspropels me to my utmost potential.
The multitude of time---'Multitude' doesn't seem like the right word here. Maybe 'amount'? --- in training came to fruition in the early hours.
We respected each others' differences, and through that were able to attain an unspoken camaraderie.
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