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Cornell ILR Supplement- The Power of Organization


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Dec 14, 2013   #1
Describe your intellectual interests, their evolution, and what makes them exciting. In your essay please address how the ILR curriculum will help you fulfill these interests and your long-term goals.

In retrospect, my interests were aimless in the beginning of high school. I had always dabbled in various activities as my ideas changed, but it was not until the end of the sophomore year when one particular concept began having an impact on me.

In the summer of 2012, I worked in the Cornell Presbyterian Hospital due to my curiosity in medicine. I have always believed that people have to experience things firsthand to discover their passion. As a site navigator, I was allowed to travel around many parts of the hospital with patients and visitors. Despite the activities that went on around the building, it was surprising how calm everything seemed. I eventually became an "ambassador" and this is when I really became interested in how each department interacted with each other as an efficient and cohesive whole.

I later learned that this had to do with organizational behavior and I became completely engrossed in how the concept dictated so many aspects of society. After taking Geopolitics in Junior year, the ideas of over-organization, globalization and the internet revolution made me realize how much influence organizing could have. Even though I found the concept challenging to fully comprehend, I realized that it permeated my life from my school, to my parents' restaurant, to the Model UN club I was a member of. For any of these groups to function, all the units in it had to work well with each other.

I took further steps into this idea in the summer of junior year when I joined the Summer leadership institute (SLI) and worked in the New York Campaign for Public advocate. The campaign really helped solidify my interest in the world of public policies and politics. SLI fueled my pursuit in this topic because it showed me real world problems that these skills could be used to solve. It also taught me leadership skills that I used to lead a small group of students in an event called New York Beautification day. Issues such as the student to prison pipeline and the rising costs of education could be solved through political activism and nonprofit organizations, both of which require skills taught at the School of Industrial Labor and Relations.

The ILR curriculum hits all of the topics I want to learn in order to fulfill my desire to understand how things relationships and networks work in a large scale organization. I am confident that it will teach me the skills to be an effective leader that can undertake the various social problems that exist in society. The classes ILR focus on can help me learn more about educational systems, labor unions and other groups that are crucial to the structure of our lives. I choose Cornell ILR because it will help me become a person who can help mold and reinvent outdated policies and ideas into new ones that can have profoundly positive effects for the future of our society.
admission2012 - / 477 90  
Dec 17, 2013   #2
Hello,

This essay is pretty weak and you do not have a compelling reason here to study at ILR. You seem to have decent experience especially with the Summer Institute. You need to exploit this experience more. Show how it really compelled you to study this at Cornell. Talk more about leadership and and your leadership roles in actual projects and how you utilized any skills learned to overcome challenges. Once you add these elements, this essay will become stronger. -Admissions Advice Online


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