In some countries it is thought advisable that children begin formal education at four years old, while in others they do not have to start school until they are seven or eight.
How far do you agree with either of these views?
Education is the first aspect to create human's quality. For this reason, many countries implement a rule in which children are supposed to start their schools at the age of four. Yet, people in other countries assess that children have to begin education at seven or eight years old. While both views seem true to some extent, it is believed that children aged seven or eight should obtain formal education and young children need to develop their creativity in the golden age.
Children are easy to imitate what they notice from people's behavior. Through this way, they will improve creativity such drawing, singing, telling a story or even planting. Under the UK's current system, children start full-time school and the formal learning of literacy and numeracy at the age of four. However, experts say this is causing profound damage in a generation which is not encouraged to learn through play. As a result, the continued focus on an early start to formal learning is likely to cause danger for their development of creativity.
On the other hand, when children are at the age of seven or eight, they are ready to obtain some forms of school subjects. This is because their cognitive and motoric skills have developed perfectly in order that they can gain much information to be processed. A country like Finland, children do not start formal, full-scale education until they are seven. Consequently, children present the best performance in the class for understanding what they learn.
The aforementioned evidence reveals that it is better for children to attend school when they are at the age of seven or eight. It is undeniable that they have already to achieve some knowledge of school thanks to the improvement of their physical abilities and brain capacities. Therefore, it is imperative that education stakeholders in several countries should take into consideration for the ages of schoolchildren before they meet formal education.
- Education is the first aspect to create human's quality. This sentence puzzled me a bit, what do you want imply, "create human equality" or create quality life for human.
- For this reason, many countries implement a rule in which children are supposedsuppose ( the action is in the present form so use the present tense of the verb) to start their schools at the age of four.
- Children are easy to imitate what they notice from people's behavior.
- This is because their cognitive and motoricmotor skills have developed perfectly in order that theyfor them tocan gain much information to be processed.
- Consequently, children present the best performance in the class for understandingand understand what they learn.
- It is undeniable that they have already to achieve some knowledge of schoolfrom school thanks to the improvement of their physical abilities and brain capacities.
- Therefore, it is imperative that education stakeholders in several countries should take into consideration, for the ages of schoolchildren before they meet formal education.
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