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What are your career goals? (to obtain a bachelors degree)


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Please i need help with corrections where necessary. The essay is going to be a short one about 3 lines of 10cm each because i'll be writing it in an application form. Please i need your help and advise.
Here is what i was able to come ur with--


My goal is to obtain a bachelors degree from any of the above institutions and field of study. (my choice of university and field of study was filled at the top) I believe that the ABC scholarship (it is organised by an organisation) is the opportunity i have been looking for and just what i need to be successful at my goals. Vitalising the potentials in me and preparing me to face the reality of life by honouring employment according to my field, in malaysia, my home country or any where in the world which can help in the development the of the world at large.

Since the topic is the goals of your careers but not your study. So I think it is better to re-arrange like:

The ultimate goal of my career is able to vitalise the potentials in me and prepare me to face the reality of life by honouring emplyments operating in my field, in Malaysia, my home country and any places in the world which can help to develop the world large. To realize my goals, I believe that the ABC scholarship is the ideal opportunity for me. It is just what I need to archive success in my field with the above institutions.



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