Pursuing new knowledge and experience in my area of interest has always been an important goal of my life. I feel that the opportunities and resources offered by Queen's University will allow me to develop new skills and fulfill my lifelong goals.
These sound like just statements. Why don't you tell them what your goal is and how Queesn's capabilities align your knowledge and skills in achieving them. That is what the admission guys are interested in knowing.
My desire to pursue a career in the computing industry stems from my great interest of the increasingly prevalent technology sector.
.... well... I feel you should tell them a more convincing reason as to why you are interested in this field
In the next four years of my life I would like to receive the best education possible. The Queen's computing program would help me achieve that.
Do a little bit of research on Queen's programs and talk about them specifically. And then tell things like how you can gain knowledge in certain areas.