'Cabana Banana nail polish' - Common Application: Topic of my choice

I really wanted to do something different for my common app essay. If this idea is terrible please tell me and I will go in a different direction. Please Help!

Everyone is different. We all have experiences that have had an impact on us. For some, that experience may have occurred in school or with family and friends but for me that experience happened when I first went to the nail salon. Although unusual, this trip helped me discover myself and showed me that I am unique and different from everyone else.

As I sat down in the nail salon, I couldn't help but notice the variety of nail polishes. They had any color that you could ever imagine. Some had glitter and some had extra pigment to really make your nails pop. The one that caught my eye was OPI's Cabana Banana nail polish. Its beautiful and bright shade of yellow was the perfect match for my personality. Yellow is the color of happiness and self-fulfillment. If I were to be accepted into your college, I will not only expand my education, I will be able to find a career that is fulfilling and will allow me to help others.

The manicurist called me over and after careful preparation she applied a clear foundation polish. This clear foundation represents the foundation that my family laid out for me to be a generous, intellectual and well-rounded individual. I believe that it is important for me to not only excel in academics but to have other responsibilities. For example, Track and Field is a major part of my life and I am devoted to it just as much as school work.

When my nails were complete, I looked at the rack where that Cabana Banana nail polish came from. It was then that I realized that I am that Cabana Banana polish and all of the other polishes represent the people around me or other students that are applying to this school. There is only one of me just like there was only one Cabana Banana on the shelf. I am unique and have many things to offer. If accepted into your college, I will continuously demonstrate great qualities of a well-rounded individual.

Hi, I think that your idea for this essay is really good, it is original, and cute, it shows off your personality well. You should re-organize your essay though. For the topic of your choice prompt- you do not need to include all of that stuff about contributing to the college, although tie it in at the end. you want your topic (banana nail polish) to be the purpose of your essay. So, if you choose to keep this topic, you will need to expand on the idea that banana nail polish is like you- original, and how each polish color is the color of another person's personality. How boring life would be with only 1 color, it is variety that makes life exciting and interesting, and that is what college will be like: a melting pot of all the different colors/ personalities that make the place so fun! keep your essay light and upbeat, and I think that you will have something great :)

Hey I love that you choose that. However try to elaborate more on how that college can help you out get me? Be in depth with what u want to do.