I would like to receive some help with essay in regards to making it stronger in its message. I need to be as unique as possible. Getting into medical is not easy and im having trouble connecting my flow and message. The only thing that I have to do is stay under 5000 characters... Thank you in advance for your help
I was born in Ukraine and during the collapse of the Soviet Union my parents moved our family to Israel. It was there that I spent most of my childhood until coming to the United States at the age of twelve. I have been a first generation immigrant twice and watching my parents start at the bottom twice really motivated me to succeed in school and make something of myself so my parents struggles won't be taken for granted.
My transition from high school to the real world and college did not go as smoothly as I would have hoped. Looking back at my academic accomplishments, my first year was a struggle of not believing in myself and my capability as well as not really knowing what I wanted to do in life. After realizing that I am the one in control of what I accomplish, I pushed myself to all my limits and found that I can do anything I set my mind to. I was no longer scared about my future and felt empowered at the opportunity to exercise my brain and expand my knowledge. This led me to my passion for science and drove me to be on the dean's list for multiple semesters after my first year. I finally knew that I wanted to be involved in science and helping people was my passion.
Growing up in Israel, one might think of constant warfare and terrorism. I was very fortunate that I lived on the coast in Haifa and away from harm. I survived a few wars, a few missile strikes, and bombings, and never got to see anything bad. Sitting in elementary school I often pondered about the other kids on the other side of the border in Palestine. How fortunate was I, living in a country with advanced medical care, while they were not? Often times, when there is a crisis or terrorism attack near the border, Israel will take in Palestinians and treat them in the local hospitals. This impacted me as a humanitarian and I even volunteered when I was fifteen while visiting the country I grew up in.
I came to Israel for three months and spent two of them volunteering at the children's hospital Beit Holim Ichilov in Tel Aviv. While working there as a nurse's aide, I realized that my passion is in medicine and that my purpose in life is to be a patient advocate so that they can receive the best possible care. My eyes were opened when I saw how filled the hospitals were and how there were not enough medical providers to see patients. Some people would have to be put in a bed in the hallway in the emergency room due to there being no rooms available. Something needs to be done about medicine not only worldwide, but perhaps locally as well.
More recently, and for the past two years, I have been working as a Medical Assistant. With this job, I have gained a substantial amount of knowledge when it comes to family medicine. I work for an independent medical provider. Working there, I also got to participate in minor surgeries such as mole removals, IUD insertions, and even vasectomies. Last year, I had noticed something that I never noticed here in Idaho before. Our population demographics have become more diverse with an influx of refugees. A lot of these refugees that came are Christian Turks and Ukrainians and both groups speak Russian, a language that I speak very fluently. In one instance in particular, a young couple came into our clinic seeking help for a stomach pain that has persisted over three weeks. The husband was from Ukraine and spoke no English at all and his wife only spoke a few words. The doctor and the couple were both relieved when they learned that I can be the middle man and translate freely between the both of them. The stomach pain was resolved and it left me with this feeling that something needs to be done here in Idaho to be able to take care of this particular group. By becoming a medical provider, I can close the gap in lack of physicians and take care of these people here in Idaho.
Idaho is ranked as one of the worst states for not having enough primary care/family physicians. As mentioned above, there has been a big movement of refugees that have been relocated to Idaho and have settled in two of Idaho's biggest cities Boise and Twin Falls as well as some of the more rural areas. These Russian speaking people are in desperate need of a health practitioner that can cater to them as well as that understand their cultural and religious needs. I would like to return to my original state and practice medicine here locally in a rural area so that I can make a difference in people's lives.
I speak three languages, I am very motivated and mature, and I am well-travelled and have had plenty of cultural diversity. I believe that these qualities set me apart from the rest and will in turn make me a well-rounded and amazing medical provider. I am ready to open another chapter in life that will provide me with the knowledge and experience to follow my dreams as well benefit and treat my future patient population.
