***I'm having trouble with a conclusion and I am not sure what a college is looking for in a letter of appeal... If you could just help me out that would be great!
My name is ******, and I have recently been informed that my application to the University of Florida was not approved. I am writing this appeal because I would like another opportunity to become a student at your university. The University of Florida was my first choice college out of those I applied to, specifically because it offers an amazing pre-medical and medical program that I feel is not surpassed by any other college in the state. If my application is appealed, I will do my best to meet and exceed the expectations required by the students attending your college.
I understand my standardized test scores are only just above the national average and I attribute this to my being homeschooled and living in a foreign country as a child. As is shown in my Advanced Placement test scores from 11th grade, when the material is available to me I am able to study and achieve my full potential; receiving a 4 in United States History and English Language and Composition, and a 5 in Spanish Language. This year I am taking five AP classes. After two years of high school in the Dominican Republic, I realized that I would have to push myself past what my old school had to offer. The only level I could take was considered "on level". This is when I made the decision to start school for the first time in the United States in order to take advanced classes. Changing from a student body of 40 to one of 1500 was a difficult transition for me and it was extremely hard for me to juggle the large caseload as well as get used to the culture and people after being away for seven years. However, I managed to join several groups and maintain a steady B+ average in my advanced courses throughout junior year.
It is extremely important to me that I receive the best education for the lowest price. After receiving my medical degree, I hope to work in a hospital and gain some experience, during which I would like to organize medical teams to various third world countries, mainly those in South America and the Caribbean. Mission work has always been my passion, and by allowing me the chance to study at your school I believe that not only I will benefit, but that those I wish to help will profit from my education in medicine.
If the problem did not lie within my grades but because this University's recent cuts to the amount of students it admitted, I would not be against changing my application to the Summer 2010 term. I have taken on a workload much harder than last year's and have received better grades. My transcripts show that even though I have two more AP classes than last year, my grades in them have improved.
***I'm having trouble with a conclusion and I
If my application is appealedreconsidered, I will do my best to meet and exceed the expectations required by the students attending your college.
I understand my standardized test scores are only just above the national average and I attribute this to my being home schooled and living in a foreign country as a child.
Going from a student body of 40 to one of 1500 was a difficult transition...
Mission work has always been my passion, and by allowing me the chance to study at your school I believe that not only will I benefit, but that those...
If the problem did not lie with my grades but because of this University's recent cuts to the number of students it admitted, I would not be against changing my application to the Summer 2010 term.
All I can think of to help the ending, is to reflect on what you said in the first paragraph, and ask them to please reconsider your application.
Good luck!!
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your in a tough spot, appeals almost never work, but i'd get some advice from your counselor or someboy who know your grades and sats, if thats an issue(which im assuming it is), have the counselor write a letter giving an explanaton about this, when you try to come up with reasons, colleges arent likely to buy them and just think your likely just coming up with bad excuses. This letter that you write should be about you and what you contribute to the campus, dont make this an argment jutifying your gpa and sats, show them something unique you can bring, as always be specific, tell a story, do something that catches their attention, and as a side note, frankly if your sats are barely above average and you have a b+ average, for a school like florida which is one of the more competitive public schools out there, being out of state(which im guessing you are), you cant be surprised by this, in fact, that likely puts you below florida's average stats, and if your below average, you really dont deserve to get in based off your numbers(which are what public school admissions are all about), so focus on something else that makes you deserving.
