Diversity is a vigorous influence that can only bring excellence in the world. Many distinctive cultures, religions, traditions and lifestyles is what makes life interesting. Diversity is the gateways to doors and opportunities, that everyone should be able to pass. We all should celebrate and appreciate how the community is diversified at the University of Maryland Community. It is the diversity which makes up a community.
^This is just a general cliche. it is boring. it sucks. Remove
I absolutely love the notion of diverse community. As I was growing up, I lived in a town, where there was not much diversity. There was no color, religions and people who were a bit different, nor did they know what diversity in a community looked like. I was one of few minorities who lived in the area. People where fascinated by how I looked and what I practice. They had acted, if I was an alien.
^How can there be no color? Did no one practice religion at all??
Obviously if you are the only minority, people may find you interesting. They may think you are different, or an 'alien' as you put it, because in effect you are. This does not mean that these people do not appreciate diversity. in fact, the fact that they were 'fascinated' only suggests that they are interested in diversity and want to know more. if these people ignored you, or discriminated against you, that defies diversity.
So my parents packed up the luggage and headed southwest. Nothing unusual or peculiar than where I lived before. I walked into the halls of education, was stunned to see the different cultures, lifestyles, and religions of the people. It was like I entered a whole new world. As I walked down the lobby, everyone was different, the flow of clashing languages glided through my ear, it sounded like gibberish. Was I in a foreign country? Wrong.
^Polish your grammar in this section.
Yea, in fact your grammar suffers in the whole of the last paragraph.
What do you look forward to gaining from the diversity of the University of Maryland community?
^You also do not answer the prompt properly.