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Mar 18, 2009, 12:16am   #1
I'd like to apologize about the weather, I promise you elect me I'll try to do something about that.

Or

Hello Students and Teachers of Culver City,

I'd like to welcome you all today, a day of momentous importance, to give a final address to the Student Body as candidate for the office of President. This is not a position to be taken lightly and definitely one not to be wasted or abused.

I came to this school only knowing one person. I'll admit, I didn't have many friends my first few months here. I had come from a tiny private school and had to adjust to this grand institution. However, that fourteen year old boy from St. Augustine is not the same man who stands before you today, asking for your vote. Today, I an aspiring leader of the Associated Student Body.

Many of you are just regular students. You never get involved in school spirit events or any activities of the like. It'd be interesting to know that until this campaign started, I was the same as you, never joining any class council or a related group. I wholeheartedly understand every reason you have not to care and with that understanding I know exactly how to get all of you involved in our school. It does seem intimidating to go up to ASB or the Administration to propose an idea or make known a complaint or grievance, I will not argue that. However, I will make it my main goal to end this perception of ASB. Under me, the lines between ASB and the general population will be blurred; therefore I will create a more personal community and government within our school. Any student will be able to contribute as they please.

CCHS sits in the center of Los Angeles, but we have no direct ties to any schools in the area, let alone the city. We must be vigilant and work towards building these ties, which we will work to construct with my Documents of Los Angeles Unity

No longer will the ideas of creative students be ignored

No longer will the complaints and grievances of students be brushed aside

No longer will we remain an isolated community, but become a leader to the schools around us.

No longer will ASB be a separate clique from the students and it WILL become the Vox Populi, the voice of the people.

Culver Rises!
Culver Prevails!
Culver Renews!

Mar 18, 2009, 01:04am   #2
Well I am running for President of the Associated Student Body at my school. I'm sorta the underdog, but I do have A LOT of support behind me. Here is my speech I'm going to give on April 2nd. I'm planning on either running with this or writing a different one, but I'm not sure yet.


Also, I apologize for speech misspell :P
 ME jurgita  
Mar 18, 2009, 01:39pm   #3
I will have the English language exam, i am very afraid :(
In the first two paragraphs, get rid of all those uses of the word "I" because, whenever you are trying to hypnotize a group, it is important to settle into their experience... pacing and leading their attention... using rhythm... entrancing the group!

Say the same thing, but say You! You! Not, "I"!

"I" is boring. Name names. Make the audience feel your presence up there...

Do not call them this ---> Many of you are just regular students. You never get involved in school spirit events or any activities of the like.


Do not presume to understand them ---->
It'd be interesting to know that until this campaign started, I was the same as you, never joining any class council or a related group. I wholeheartedly understand every reason you have not to care and with that understanding I know exactly how to get all of you involved in our school.


No unnecessary words--->
It does seem intimidating to go up to ASB or the Administration to propose an idea or make known a complaint or grievance, I will not argue that.

Your job is to ge them excited. Before you compose this speech, make a list of words that feel good to hear. You can get very good at this!!
Mar 20, 2009, 12:13am   #5
Thanks for the reply, I rewrote most of the speech

I'd like to apologize about the weather, I promise you elect me I'll try to do something about that.

Our school is suffering socially, economically, and culturally. Socially, because our leadership and general membership are so separated that ASB can't accurately be called representatives of the people. I will make it my main goal to end this aspect of ASB and create a more personal community within our school where everyone will be able to contribute as they please. However, that will be simple compared to our economic and cultural issues.

Its not going to be easy, we'll all have to sacrifice some, and results won't be instantaneous. You're going to work harder than you ever worked before. But that's fine; we'll just get tougher with it! If a person grits his teeth and shows real determination, failure is not an option. That's how winning is done!

Who's with me?

This could be the greatest year of our lives, but you're going to let it be the worst if you give up. And I guarantee a week won't go by in your life you won't regret walking out, letting it get the best of you.

Well, I'm not quitting. We've come too far! I'm going to stay right here and fight for this cause. A day may come when our courage and determination fails... but it is not THIS day.

No longer will the complaints and grievances of students be brushed aside

ASB WILL become the true Vox Populi, the voice of the people.

This is YOUR time! Seize the day, never give up, victory or defeat... that's the Culver Way!



I actually need to trim this in half, since its a minuet too long
Mar 20, 2009, 12:27am   #6
"You're going to work harder than you ever worked before. But that's fine; " Stick with "we." You're going with a populist, "I'm one of you" approach, and you don't want to break that here.

"Who's with me?" If the student body is as apathetic as you originally made them out to be, you will need to fire them up a lot more before anyone responds to this positively.

"This could be the greatest year of our lives, but you're going to let it be the worst if you give up. And I guarantee a week won't go by in your life you won't regret walking out, letting it get the best of you.

Well, I'm not quitting. We've come too far! I'm going to stay right here and fight for this cause. A day may come when our courage and determination fails... but it is not THIS day." More division between you and them. Stick with "we." Kudos on the LOTR reference. You'll win the nerd and geek votes, and the people you would normally alienate won't catch it, so that's good.

"This is OUR time" Not bad. If you're going to go populist, stick with it throughout, and you should be fine.
Mar 25, 2009, 10:20pm   #8
Though your speech is very rousing in theory, it expects a little to much from the audience. If a person isn't motivated by your anaphora-fueled ending, your message might feel overbearing and even obnoxious!

I'm a high school student myself and I'll have to admit that if I heard someone giving this speech I'd either do one of two things:
-Smirk and share a joke with a nearby friend at your expense
-Look on with disdain

The majority of high school students (which I am assuming is your target demographic) doesn't really put much stock in school issues. Most just want an affable candidate: they don't expect some being of perfection who'll reduce the school week to 4 days and abolish homework. The whole weather joke is bland and sounds a bit too prepared. Jokes are a great way to connect with your audience, though.

Also:
Many of you are just regular students. You never get involved in school spirit events or any activities of the like

This is insulting and is dangerous in two ways:
- You are saying that people who ARE involved in such activities are not regular students.
- Most of the students who bother to vote are probably those who participate in such activities.



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