hi everyone .. i wrote a small paragraph ,, in fact it is answer but the teacher told me to write it as a paragraph.
i need someone to check the grammar for me please :)
B.2. Which foods did dislike as child? Which foods do dislike as an adult? Why do you think food preferences change as you get older?
There is many different kind of foods in this world. Also there are foods that we like and we don't. There are some of foods that I don't like when I was a child. Such as, tomato and red meat. Also there are some of foods that I don't like it now. Like sea foods. However, I think food preferences change as we get older. Because our taste now get different than were we children. And I think that when we children we can eat anything were. But, now we grow up and we could realize what kind of food that we eat.
I think some sentences are illogical~
Which foods did we dislike when we were child ? Which foods do we dislike as an adult? Why do you think food preferences change as you get older?
There are many different kind of foods in this world. Also(I do not think also is useful here, you can delete it or use AND instead) there are foods that we like and we don't. There are some of foods that I didn't like when I was a child. Such as, tomato and red meat. Also there are some of(no " of" here) foods that I don't like it （you cannot use it here）now.(the comma must be deleted and Like should change into the small letter) Like sea foods. However, I think food preferences change as we get older. Because our taste now get different than were we children(Our taste now is different from it when we were children). And I think that when we children we can eat anything were . But, now we grow up and we could realize (not appropriate) what kind of food that we eat.
jojorashedThreads: 1
Posts: 1 Today, 08:47am #1
Hi there
In my opinion, I see some grammatical errors but more importantly you'd better write your paragraph with more organized logic.
I think given evidence isn't supporting your statement well. And you repeat 'there is/there are, foods I don't like, foods I like' too much.
Hopefully my suggestion will help you.
Cheers!
My suggestion :
Which foods do children hate? What foods do adults dislike? Why do you think that food preferences change as you get older?
There are many diffrent kinds of foods in the world, but some are loved and others aren't. From my point of view, food prefrences change as we get older.
For example, when I was a child I didn't like tomatoes and red meat. Getting older, I didn't like seafoods too. When we were children we're not good at recognize diffrent tastes of foods. However, now that we are adults we can easily realize the tastes by accumulated experiences.
thank you sooo much :) ,..your Advices Has helped me a lot.
anniejerry and z1z1z1z1 thanks a lot ^^
