The reason for this is because I understand that it's the one industry that will propel me forward towards success.
Be a little more specific as to why you think it would make a good future for you.
However, I find that financial restraintsconstraints are haltinga great barrier for my future studies
With two siblings in university my parents are under financial stress. With financial aid my parents can be relieved of monetary stress and I can pursue my dreams. (I'm thinking about adding more here or editing this last section.)
Yes .... you need to elaborate the need for financial assistance. Talk more about your parent's inability to support you financially. Try to convince them that you have genuine reasons. Add more feelings and emotions when you explain those difficulties. So, in a nutshell, you need to tell them that you deserve to pursue studies ( you have tackled this part with talking about your passion as well as vision) and then the hardships (mainly financial).