I've thought about writing something about Arabian and Yemeni cultures, since I'm from Yemen, so do you think that will work or should I start with a different topic?
My first thought about this is that it is SO common to write about one's cultural heritage. I think it is more exciting and powerful to write about a clear, detailed plan you have devsed for the next 5 years. That will be most impressive.
Hey, your first sentence is weak. It makes it sound like you casually found the school, searching on the Internet. How about if you start like this:
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My Opportunity Grant scholarship adviser at the Education USA center at AMIDEAST Sanaa was the first person to tell me about Colorado College. "XXX XXXX XXXX XX XXXX XXXXXX XXXX," she said, adding that Colorado was a top liberal arts school with excellent financial aid opportunities for international students.
And be sure to expound a clear plan for your future! Be a passionate and resolute visionary.