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Multi-Use Scholarship Essay/ What is important to you and why?


ryoga 2 / 5  
Apr 7, 2013   #1
What is important to you and why?

The most important thing to me is my future. I feel like, many others, that I have no idea where it is going. I spent middle school through high school with the determination of becoming an orthopedic pediatrician, due to my skill in the sciences and interest in the field. The reason for my interest was because of a bone condition called Genu Valgum I suffered from (commonly known as Knock-Knees) For many years, my doctors failed to diagnose my condition, blaming it on other things. So my mother decided to do this her way. The research effort that my family did was the spark that started the burning passion I have for science. I wish to prevent the same events from affecting others, so that they won't suffer like I. I joined many programs to help supplement my education, in order to put me on the right track. But during my senior year of HS, I discovered another talent that I had. Writing. I could make relatable, yet complex stories that all of my friends and even some teachers liked. But my love for writing detracted from my studies to the point where I wasn't doing so great in some classes. Eventually, I got into college and realized one thing. I can do anything I want as long as I know I am capable. I could major in Biology and English and still do the things I love.
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Apr 8, 2013   #2
I feel like, many others, that I have no idea where it is going.

... hey this is bad :D ... This sounds as if you do not know where you are heading and hence you are far from visionary.

The reason for my interest was because of a bone condition called Genu Valgum I suffered from (commonly known as Knock-Knees)

My interest got nurtured by Genu Valgum, a condition in bones which is commonly known as Knock-knees that I suffered from young age.

For many years, my doctors failed to diagnose my condition, blaming it on other things

For many years, the doctors failed to diagnose this condition and assumed it to be related to other problems.
OP ryoga 2 / 5  
Apr 8, 2013   #3
So for the second sentence, I could write "Like many others, I have many interests I love, but I cannot narrow my focus to just one." or something like that?


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