Pretty good. Some minor stuff:
This drew me to study economics because
e conomists are able to explain and affect people's livelihood. In my opinion,
e conomics is about understanding people as consumers, producers, competitors
, and above all as human beings with innate emotions.
"I have always enjoyed and been strong in areas that require problem solving
and analytical and mathematical skills"
It is a well known fact that
It is a well known fact that phrases like this are weak and verbose. Revise.