It's my first trial , i'd appreciate any kind of comments about its length , vocab and grammar mistakes everything thankss.
Dear Sir:
I am writing to apply for the EU-Metallic scholarship, in order to join the master's program at Cardiff Metropolitan.
Firstly, I graduated in July 2012 from the Arab academy for science and technology, College of management and technology, Egypt, with a GPA of 3.93/4.0. My degree focuses on financial management; through my studies I became fascinated with issues that designate the financial environment in the world economy. Moreover, I am considering taking the CFA at a future time.
Secondly, Cardiff Metropolitan business school is considered to be one of the finest schools in business and management in the UK , with an international reputation for excellence in research and learning. As a result of that, I would be honored to have the chance to join the MSc in finance program at Cardiff in the interest of promoting my passion for learning finance.
Thirdly, The blessings do not ends at this point, gaining cultural differences experience, meeting different people, dealing with new situations and most importantly living in a lovely country where I can enjoy walking in Snowdonia or visiting Portmeiron.It is a full package of entertainment, learning and experience.
To sum up ,Chances are not provided every day we have to have faith in our self and seek these chances ,here I am , one of the top 5 students at my college trying to grasp your attention to help me to be a future possible student at Cardiff to continue my dream to be one of the greatest financial analysts to contribute in the development and efficiency of the world economy .
Best regards
Michael George
Do not start with Firstly, Secondly....
You get a scholarship that easily, I don't think so!!
I guess way many people are applying for the same spot and it's just way short!
I didn't get enough neither in the first para nor in any other!
Shouldn't you be saying about your experiences more! Try to tell more about the institution and tell why you need the scholarship or why you are the one whom the scholarship should be given to... I guess any reader would want to hear about more on what you wanna do you in the future...
Ok will do , thanks for ur beneficial comment ,the thing that i dont have much of experience only trainings not related to the field that much , i will try to talk about my future though.
How about that? . N.B : documents states the letter shouldn't be more than 1 page , thanks a lot for ur help
Dear Sir:
I am writing to apply for the EU-Metallic scholarship, in order to join the master's program at Cardiff Metropolitan.
I graduated in July 2012 from the Arab academy for science and technology, College of management and technology, Egypt, with a GPA of 3.93/4.0. My degree focuses on financial management; through my studies I became fascinated how the economics, business and everything is related to finance. I became a finance addicted, specially the financial analysis field the way how it is considered to be the mind of any company where the professional financial analysts can use their distinctive analytical skills , deciding where to invest ,at what time ,in what securities. I have been dreaming to become one of those professionals that can step up their company ,economy or their country and contribute to the world by their experience and unique skills of analyzing different events and trends in the economy and expectations in the matter of being vulnerable to regression ,moreover emphasizing the weak and strong points in every company's departments and divisions aiding in improving its financial position and maximizing it's market value in the economy rising by that the interest of investors.
Cardiff Metropolitan business school is considered to be one of the finest schools in business and management in the UK , with an international reputation for excellence in research and learning.The EU-Metalic programme provided the chance to apply for the masters programme at Cardiff it is certainly an outstanding chance for me to continue on with my post graduate education , would add to me the required knowledge to move on to the next step towards my dream to be a top financial analyst at one of the greatest securities firm in the world. Also, I am planning to provide a dissertation letter that study a specific issue in the Europe economy hoping that it will add much of new insights.
Post-graduate studies are highly expensive whether masters programs or international certificates,As you can conclude I am starting my career and can't afford these expensive programs ,I would be honored to have the chance to join the MSc in finance program at Cardiff in the interest of promoting my passion for learning finance.
The blessings do not ends at this point, gaining cultural differences experience, meeting different people, dealing with new situations and most importantly living in a lovely country where I can enjoy walking in Snowdonia or visiting Portmeiron.It is a full package of entertainment, learning and experience.
To sum up ,Chances are not provided every day we have to have faith in our self and seek these chances ,here I am , one of the top 5 students at my college trying to grasp your attention to help me to be a future possible student at Cardiff to continue my dream to be one of the top financial analysts to contribute in the development and efficiency of the world economy .
Best regards
Michael George
