I REALLY want to go to the University of Arizona but the tuition is crazy, after seeing that I received the Provost's Scholarship for 12,000 a year I started applying for scholarships like crazy. I'm writing an essay for one right now. The prompt states, "describe any unusual or personal experiences or income situations that make it difficult for you and/or your family to contribute to the cost of your education and how you will overcome these obstacles. "
My essay:
Ever since I was two my dad has been supporting me and my sister while paying child support for his other two kids from a previous marriage. He continues today to pay his mortgage on a house for his kids to live in my and he still provides for his four kids as well as providing care to his grandchildren from my ill-equipped older siblings. My mother has been physically, emotionally, and financially out of the picture since the divorce; she never provided my dad with a dime of child support, yet he still managed to raise his four kids. As the son of a single parent with one kid in college and soon to be two I, personally, cannot afford the cost of college.
I take my education very seriously, and I take pride in expanding my knowledge of the world and all that inhabits it; college is simply the next step in a plan for the betterment of myself. I have always wanted to go to college and Arizona has been my dream school ever since I started looking into universities. Honestly, if you would have asked me how I would handle the financial aspects of college, I would have simply told you, I cannot. Although, after receiving the Provost's scholarship my dream start to become more of a reality.
With the sudden realization that I could actually go to the school of my dreams, I made a plan in order to deal with the fees attached to college. I have been working a job ever since I got my license and I have been saving as much as a can from that which a plan to put towards college.I intend to get an on-campus job to help defray the costs of my education, but after evaluating my situation I have determined that this alone will not be sufficient. In regards to that, I aim to apply for as many scholarships as I can to bring tuition down to an amount that I can handle. As for the remaining costs, I plan to use financial aid to pay for it. However, investments are what drive the economy- as an individual, my personal investments are in my education. I would extremely appreciate if you could invest in me because I have an ambition to do amazing things for this world.
Ok, you take the financial issues first and then you talk about your passion for furthering studies. I feel it is better you change the order. Tell them how keen you are to pursue your studies and make them feel that you are a deserving case. Then start talking about he obstacles, mainly financial constraints.
