BG Scholarship essay on your academic roles and contributions to you school/community

Everyone Imagines their day with thier blue gown and yellow sash and walking to recieve your diploma known as graduation. At least that has been my goal since the moment i started grade school.I remeber everyone telling me that it was never going to happen for me but that only made me stronger and made me push myself even more. Proving everyone wrong was the best accomplishent i could have done. Now im a senior and with only a few months till MY graduation i am able to thhank all the people who didnt belive in me because that only made me acomplish goals i thought i could never had done. Some academic roals that i have been able to achieve are being part of the AAA academy which is also known as the honors program and IB program.Not only am i an honor student but i have been giving honor rolls since 6th grade. Along with ...[..]

Graduating High School is one of the greatest accomplishments in a teen life. This has been my goal since the moment I started grade school. I remember others telling me this would never happen; but it only made me more determined. Proving others wrong was the best accomplishment I could have ever imagined. I am now a Senior; with high hopes and aspiration of obtaining a degree in Business to fulfill my life long dream

I'm sorry I tried to help but the essay is in critical need of corrections. Please take my advice and use spell check. You have to many run on sentence as well as sentences with no subject. There are also repetitive sentences. I applaud your drive but do not send this off sit down and re-write this. I made some corrections in the first paragraph but assisting you any further would call for me to write the entire essay for you. Good Luck on your future endeavors.

Note when you write an essay it can't all be one paragraph. A paragraph consists of three to four sentences no more. When you jump to a new subject you should create a new paragraph. And remember you are not texting please capitalize you I's and nouns which consist of a person place or thing.

I am able to thank all the people who didnt belive in me because that only made me accomplish goals i thought i could never had done. Some academic roals that i have been able to achieve are being part of the AAA academy which is also known as the honors program and IB program.Not only am i an honor student but i have been giving honor rolls since 6th grade. Along with that, i was able take a buisness class where i was able to come up with my own pretend business. My business class also helped me achieve my microsoft word certificate, which indicates that i am a word certified person. On top of all this I have been involved in my school for the most that i can. I am an active member of the interact club, Yes I can club, Student council and art club.I have also helped out my community with volunteering at my local elementary school and helping out the kids improve thier writing and reading. Not only am i involved in all these clubs, but i am also the secretary of my Senior class, which has been a great expierence becasue i am able to be aware of everything that is going on inmy school and i am able to help out and throw ideas to make our senior year more memorable. Being a class officer has taught me responisbility and how to be more socialble and organized.

Maybe what you should do is start off with a list of all your academic roles and contributions to your school and or community and pick three that stand out to you the most and you have the most information to write about then you can formulate paragraphs like starting an introduction on maybe your background or what your going to be talking about then a few other paragraphs explaining what you've done then ending the entire essay by stating what you've done, maybe how you can make a difference, etc. its not horrible by any means just needs the basic structure setup and grammatical corrections.

High school is not a proper noun in that first sentence and should not be capitalized.

This has been my goal since the moment I started grade school.---Not an impressive goal! I don't think this helps... I think you should tell about a higher goal, something about what is important to you in life.

I don't think you should make graduation seem like a difficult goal to achieve. Focus on a career goal... something important to you.

...have been giving honor rolls since 6th consistently listed on the honor rolls since the sixth grade.

When you write the word "I" you always have to capitalize it! :-) So... do that.

:-) Let's see another draft! I like the great participation from everyone in this thread, and I bet a lot of learning will happen here.