The greatest lawyer in the world, Abraham Lincoln, which(Who ) is also the first president of the united state had fought heavily against the appertide ideology and vanished the social classes really aspired me.He had a strong heart and faith in whatever he is doing.
<- Aside from the grammar problems, this is a run on sentence. Not only does it look aesthetically displeasing, but it can also be misconstrued as AL was the 1st president. Introduce proper breaks to make your point clearer.
To make a different, I chose to study law as well as syariah
. To make a
difference (Not different), I want (Not chose. Not sure whether you started studying law yet)
Well(You're writing an essay, not a dialog or piece of discourse). Someone need(
s ) to do something.(<-Add a break here, avoid run-on sentences).
To look to the chaos happened nowadays.
I think the essay looks solid content-wise, but perhaps you can make it even stronger by elaborating your aspirations more.