Hello, this is a rough draft of a scholarship essay that I have to write so it may be a little rusty. I'd really appreciate any feedback! I sometimes tend to get off topic so I'd like to be reassured that I fully answered the promt. Help on spelling and grammatical errors would also be appreciated. Thanks in advance for any of help! :)
Please state educational and career goals and the reason for choosing your major.
As a young girl, I saw my parents argue with each other almost on a daily basis. Some arguments were smaller than others, however, the smallest of the bunch accumulated all together with the bigger ones, leading towards my parents' separation. Although their separation was quite unfortunate, it was the best option for my family, and through the experience I discovered who and what I want to be in life: a columnist who provides support for people, specifically young teenage girls, seeking to overcome adversities.
During the time that my parents were going through problems, I didn't really have anybody to speak to about how I felt. I found myself feeling very lonesome as I felt that nobody else in the world understood what I was going through. At that point is when I resorted to reading online and magazine articles. Most of the websites and magazines where I read these articles were directed towards an audience of teenage girls. I'd finally found an outlet that allowed me to process through the emotions I was feeling. I wasn't necessarily speaking to somebody about how I felt but it was comforting to know that I wasn't the only girl in the world struggling with what appeared to be a tragic issue. These articles strongly helped me cope with my parents' separation and allowed me to see that the whole experience was just an opportunity for growth. It's difficult to say how I would have handled the whole situation had it not been for the support articles but it is because of them that I aspire to one day switch roles and become a columnist for both a magazine and an online outlet myself.
Taking the role of providing teenage girls with advice on overcoming adversities is a huge responsibility and for that reason I plan on attending a four-year university to earn both a Bachelor's degree in Psychology and a Master's degree in Mass Communications. My ultimate goal is to be able to make a difference in young women's lives by providing them with the confidence, motivation, self-esteem, and the knowledge that they need in order to succeed in life while hurdling over its obstacles. Having a Bachelor's degree in Psychology would help me achieve the social aspect of it as I'd gain a greater understanding of people and human nature, giving me the ability to answer questions and distribute information in a logical, credible, and scientific manner. I'd achieve the professional aspect of it by obtaining a Master's degree in Mass Communications. Having a Master's in Mass Communications would give me the ability to publicize my articles in a way that effectively conveys my message as I'd be academically trained in electronic media, visual communications, digital media production, photography, and writing. Tying the two degrees together would help me take my goal of becoming a columnist who helps others to a whole other level.
I strongly believe that the limit to which one can help those around him or her can never truly be sufficed and for that reason my goal of helping young women by becoming a columnist doesn't stop there. This goal is also influenced by my relish for writing but after I gain some experience in helping others, I'd like to take things to a whole other level and take lead in a project that would actively reach a wider range of young women and girls who wouldn't have to read my articles to receive help. This project would take form either as a campaign or a program. It would be designed with the purpose of gathering young women together to form a counseling or support group without having to feel as though something is terribly wrong with them. This project would also be designed with the purpose of helping members build and/or boost their confidence, motivation, and self-esteem. Members would hopefully walk away from the campaign or program knowing that they are worthy individuals who are capable of succeeding in life despite their hardships. Beyond this project, I'd also like to create my own blog where I could connect to readers on a more personal basis.
I once was a young girl who didn't really have anybody to speak to, but now as a young woman I aspire to speak to many. Over the years I've learned a lot about the blessings and hardships of life, and I'd like to be able to share my experiences and any gained wisdom with as many young girls and young women as possible. Speaking from experience, sometimes all it takes to make a change in life or to move on is stumbling across a few words of wisdom. I'd like my articles to be the little halt that breaks that stumble, just as somebody else's were for me.
Some arguments were smaller than others, however, the smallest of the bunch accumulated all together with the bigger ones, leading towards my parents' separation.
I wish you rephrased this... This does not flow smooth and this is something you can tell them with a more emotional appeal.
Although their separation was quite unfortunate, it was the best option for my family, and through the experience I discovered who and what I want to be in life
Their separation was a bitter experience for me. However, as every cloud has a silver line, it is this unfortunate event that shaped me into the person who I am today and helped me understand what I want to be in life.a columnist who provides support for people, specifically young teenage girls, seeking to overcome adversities.
Today I am a columnist who stands by the people, especially young teenage girls who seek overcoming adversities.