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Sports are a big part of culture in the United States and across the world. It influences many people in different ways. For me sports helped influenced my character. During my four years at Mahwah High School I have been involved in many clubs. But my involvement in sports has benefited me the most. I have been a three sport athlete since my freshman year. Running cross country in the fall, indoor track in the winter, and outdoor track in the spring. My participation in these sports has taught me the values of teamwork, self-confidence, and respect. These values helped influence my character in my high school years and will also help me in my college years and with my career choice in my future.
People think of track and cross country as individual sports, but it isn't. In order for teams to win meets, athletes must perform at their best level and place in their events. As a captain for the indoor track team, I had to demonstrate teamwork in many ways. I would always make sure each team member was able to complete the workouts. If a teammate was struggling during the workout, I would use positive encouragement to help him complete the workout. During the workouts I would push myself knowing my teammates where watching hoping they would do the same and eventually reach their full potential in the sport. When runners' teams excel, they all win. Their best efforts, combined with those of their teammates, grow into something far greater and far more satisfying than any an individual could have achieved alone. Teams make the runner a part of something that matters. They are the fountain from which all rewards will flow.
Self- Confidence is an important value that I have learned through my involvement in high school sports. I use to be nervous before running in meets, but through experience I have learned to be relaxed. Being relaxed has helped me perform better in meets. When I am relaxed I am confident that my performance will be successful. Even through unsuccessful meets, I have learned that in every sport there is always going to be a couple of struggles. After an unsuccessful meet I would work harder in practice hoping I would have a better outcome next meet.
Respect is another value I have learned through my involvement in sports. In order for a successful season an athlete must respect: their coaches, teammates, and their opponents. It is necessary to respect the coaches because they are the people who help the athletes reach their season goals. Coaches are beneficial to a teams success because without them athletes wouldn't know what to do during practice. Like coaches, teammates are as important to a team's success. My teammates were an important part of my success. During practice I always had someone pushing me, which helped me get the maximum results that made me run faster. Respecting your opponents can also help your character. First of all it shows sportsmanship which is a positive characteristic. And if you are lucky your opponent will share tips/ strategies that may benefit you. Through respecting my opponents I was able to make new friends from different teams.
All of these values are essential to any career. Working in a career is like being on a sports team. Teammates are like co-workers and coaches are like supervisors. All of these values will help me in my chosen career of public relations/marketing. In order to be successful in both of these careers, it is necessary to learn these values. Both of these careers involve interaction with team members and potential clients. These values will also help me in my college years. I will be interacting with people who I have never met before. And with these values I'll be able to meet new friends just like I did in my involvement in high school sports.
It influences many people in different ways. For me sports helped influenced My personality reflects the strength and mental clarity that I developed through sports. During my four years at Mahwah High School, I have been involved in many clubs, but my involvement ...

People think of track and cross country as individual sports, but it isn't.

That sentence does not work. However, the paragraph is actually pretty cool if you start with:In order for teams to win meets, athletes must perform


Working among colleagues within a field of expertise is like being on a sports team.
That is a cool thought!

Good luck with this!
Apr 10, 2009, 04:07am   #3
You need to vary your sentence length and structure. At the moment, every sentence is roughly as long as every other sentence, and uses pretty much the same construction. This makes your essay monotonous. In fact, my attention began to wander halfway through your first paragraph, and I stopped reading altogether after the first few sentences of your second. Try combining some of your sentences, as well as using a variety of different punctuation marks -- dashes are good, as are semi-colons and parenthesis (though you shouldn't overuse them). There's not much point in having good content and decent grammar if you adopt a soporific style that causes the reader to tune out part way through.



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