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Five star customer services; Hospitality management - SCHOLARSHIP ESSAY


Ifranco 2 / 4  
Jan 20, 2015   #1
Please write an essay detailing your career goals, how you plan to give back to your community, and how your family and cultural background have shaped who you are.

WHAT I HAVE SO FAR ...

I will pursue a four year degree in hospitality management and discover what there is behind any closed door that I encounter. I am an ambitious student who enjoys working with people and this career will provide me with tremendous opportunities. Since the hospitality and tourism industry operates in a highly competitive environment I hope to develop a strong business foundation and customer service skills. I know that once I have graduated with this career I will be well rounded with a combination of business and life skills that are in high demand with employers. I will become an entrepreneur determined to take risks in order to fulfill the most important career goal, which is to open my very own hotel.

Once I have obtained my education and experience I will come back home to my community from where I started, and provide five star customer services. It will be a pleasure for me to be the one accommodating tourist that arrive from near and far. Furthermore, I will be a proud owner of one of the very few hotels in the community which will increase tourism and the economy. Not only do I plan to provide excellent customer service in my community, but also an opportunity to students who desire to travel the same path as I will. These students will have the chance to attend internships and volunteer in my hotel which would guide them to success in the hospitality field. Students in this community with determination will be offered scholarships in order to continue a successful career path.
vangiespen - / 4,134 1449  
Jan 20, 2015   #2
Isabel, is there a way to connect your family and cultural background with your desire to complete a degree in Hospitality Management? It would seem that such a passion for this field of work has to come from somewhere and by presenting the foundation of this as stemming from your family and culture, you will be able to present yourself as a person who lives and breathes the objectives of a person who works in this field. You need to show how your exposure to family and traditions have helped shape your interest in this field, if that will be possible. Try to be more specific about your career goals and plans. Roll out your short term plans over the next 5 years and then hit us with your long term plans over the next 10-20 years. Maybe you want to own your hotel in your homeland in the future or work something along those lines. Discuss it. Be solid in your career goals and objectives. That way the scholarship committee members can decide if your goals and objectives align with their own.
OP Ifranco 2 / 4  
Jan 20, 2015   #3
I still need to work on fixing my career goals paragraph.. but how is this coming along?

My family is very understanding whether it is about cultural differences, religious beliefs, or economic situations. They have taught me to be an open minded person and accept individuals for who they are. Most importantly my family's unity has given me the strength and courage to take the initiative and not be afraid to challenge myself with vigorous tasks. I have also had the opportunity to be raised in a community that cherishes and warmly welcomes people from different cultural backgrounds which has greatly impacted who I am. Throughout the years I have learned new languages and different types of cultural and religious beliefs from immigrants that are constantly arriving in my community. Both my family and community have positively influenced my decisions including my career choice.

I will pursue a four year degree in hospitality management and discover what there is behind any closed door that I encounter. I am an ambitious student who enjoys working with people and this career will provide me with tremendous opportunities. Since the hospitality and tourism industry operates in a highly competitive environment I hope to develop a strong business foundation and customer service skills. I know that once I have graduated with this career I will be well rounded with a combination of business and life skills that are in high demand with employers. I will become an entrepreneur determined to take risks in order to fulfill the most important career goal, which is to open my very own hotel.

Once I have obtained my education and experience I will come back home to my community from where I started, and provide five star customer services. It will be a pleasure for me to be the one accommodating tourist that arrive from near and far. Furthermore, I will be a proud owner of one of the very few hotels in the community which will increase tourism and the economy. Not only do I plan to provide excellent customer service in my community, but also an opportunity to students who desire to travel the same path as I will. These students will have the chance to attend internships and volunteer in my hotel which would guide them to success in the hospitality field. Students in this community with determination will be offered scholarships in order to continue a successful career path.
vangiespen - / 4,134 1449  
Jan 20, 2015   #4
You need to write a transition paragraph that will help ease the reader into the change of direction towards the middle of the essay from your background to your college career plans and goals. Your transitory paragraph should contain an anecdote about how your family have welcome a diverse number of people into your home over the years and always giving them a memorable experience as guests of your household. Such a story will provide the necessary basis for your interest in hospitality management. Mention things that you did when you had visitors that relate to a simple foundation of hospitality management. Placing that paragraph in the center of the essay will serve to be a more effective transition paragraph rather than the abrupt change in discussion that you have now. Your essay is coming along quite well. It is far from being ready for submission but with the proper editing, it should be ready sooner rather than later for you to use :-)
OP Ifranco 2 / 4  
Jan 24, 2015   #5
THANK YOU :)


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