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'how to apply and what to write?' - Self introduction essay for KGSP scholarship


Leigh 1 / 2  
Aug 22, 2014   #1
Hi friends, am going to apply for a scholarship program in Korea. Can anyone give me tips on how to apply and what to write it would be much appreciated and easier
vangiespen - / 4,134 1449  
Aug 23, 2014   #2
The best information to put in a personal essay always has to do with your personal accomplishments and activities that have relevance towards the course you are

applying for. By showing them that you have proper exposure and activities that make you a very good candidate as a student, the scholarship committee will know that you are very serious about your chosen career path and will not be dropping out to change courses midstream. You also have to assure them that the scholarship is very

important towards achieving your end goal of graduation and how you plan to help promote the scholarship program during your time as a student and even after graduation. It is not really very difficult to write this sort of paper as long as you know what the scholarship committee is looking for and you will be able to respond to it. If they have any essay prompt, make sure to address all of the questions that they are asking of you in order to gain their interest and attention.
matar770 1 / 8  
Aug 27, 2014   #3
What do i have to say if the scholarship is provided for many majors and the scholarship committee is just providing it, i.e. they will provide the tuition fees and the choice of the course is set by the scholarship holder?
vangiespen - / 4,134 1449  
Aug 27, 2014   #4
Then tell them what course you plan to take and how the scholarship can help you achieve that. It is important to create a personal connection between the scholarship program and the course you plan to take. They are not just going to give the scholarship to anybody who applies for it. You need to appeal to their sense of responsibility by letting them know that they will be providing you with an education that will eventually serve the greater good. Scholarships are all about giving back either to the foundation that provided the scholarship or giving back to the community. Talk about how you plan to do that with their help. Then mention anything about yourself and your accomplishments that you feel will make your application stand out. Remember, these people read hundreds of applications a day, they need to be hooked in by your first paragraph or you might lose their interest. Create an interesting hook for your application essay so that they will read your application essay to the very end. I hope my advice helps you :-) Good luck!
OP Leigh 1 / 2  
Sep 3, 2014   #5
Hi friends, thank you so much. Am trying to develop the personal statement. Please correct the study plan i developed. I would like to get some opinions on how good is it, how can it be improved or any mistakes i have done.

The decision of mine to study Microbiology and Biotechnology at XYZ university and XYZ university and also XYZ university was prompted because from my researches, they are one of the best universities in Korea known for having an outstanding global academic reputation and strong ranking across many facilities. Because of its, excellent environment, i wish to pursue my personal goals of percieving more about the field of microbiology and biotechnology. Furthermore, I also researched about biotechnology and microbiology. I am very excited about genetic manipulation and curios to know more. I will try my best to acquire high academic achievement over the time I stay in Korea. I will adhere strictly to time management, as that would help my perfomance academically. Moreover, I will not miss lectures. I will make sure to take my notes and review myself after and before every lecture(class) to asess my strengths and weaknesses. I also intend to gain a rich exposure by interacting anf networking with students, professors, and other staff who could guide me through the right path. After my undergraduate study is over, I will make sure to further my studies to get more insight and extensive knowledge.I will try my best to get the best result to pursue my dream in the future when i finish my degree, i will use all my knowledge to serve my country and the world's problem
vangiespen - / 4,134 1449  
Sep 3, 2014   #6
Hi Leigh, Let me see if I can help you out here.

The decision of mine to study Microbiology and Biotechnology at XYZ university and XYZ university and also XYZ university was prompted because from my researches, they are one of the best universities in Korea known for having an outstanding global academic reputation and strong ranking across many facilities .

- My decision to study ... at XYZ University... stemmed from the results of my research into the Korean universities that best represent the country's academic... across many educational institutions.

- I see a conflict of interests here. You should not mention that you have applied to more than one university in any statement that you write. These universities do not care about that. More likely, the admissions officer will regard your application as a nuisance application instead.

Because of its, excellent environment, i wish to pursue my personal goals of percieving more about the field of microbiology and biotechnology.

- Which school are you talking about?

Furthermore, I also researched about biotechnology and microbiology. I am very excited about genetic manipulation and curios to know more.

- Do you have any clinical or research results to add to this paragraph that will prove your claim?

I will try my best to acquire high academic achievement over the time I stay in Korea .

- I am looking forward to learning from the Korean leaders in the field and I am also excited about developing an exemplary academic career during my stay in Korea.

I will adhere strictly to time management, as that would help my perfomance academically. Moreover, I will not miss lectures. I will make sure to take my notes and review myself after and before every lecture(class) to asess my strengths and weaknesses

- Don't make promises you cannot keep. The admissions officer is not interested in student promises. All this sentence does is present you in a negative light because you are saying you used to do that but won't anymore.

I also intend to gain a rich exposure by interacting anf networking with students, professors, and other staff who could guide me through the right path.

- and networking...
- Aside from that one word deletion and spelling correction, this is a strong sentence that shows how you plan to represent yourself as a student at the university.

After my undergraduate study is over, I will make sure to further my studies to get more insight and extensive knowledge.I will try my best toget the best result to pursue my dream in the future when i finish my degree, iwill use all my knowledge to serve my country and the world's problem

- ... pursue my dream and use ...

While there are still portions of this essay that can be developed to a great extent, you did very well in delivering the idea of what you want to say in your essay. Just remember as you revise this paper that you are trying to sell yourself as an excellent candidate for the university and should therefore play up all of your strengths and avoid mentioning (potential) weaknesses. Good luck with your revision. I know the next version will be even better :-)
dunguyen 9 / 19 6  
Sep 5, 2014   #7
Hi,

From my personal experience, you should spend time to research this particular university you are applying to. You need to understand the school, the program and how you will be a good fit with them. If you are applying to different schools, just make sure you are delineating personal achievements relating to specific interests of each school. Show them your interests align with theirs. If you are a foreign student who wishes to study in Korea, then you can tell them how particularly Korea becomes your first choice of education (culture, people, etc.) and any intention to work in Korea in the future perhaps. Make your points unique and cogent, I think that the key to gain acceptance from the scholarship committee.

Hope these help,
D.
vangiespen - / 4,134 1449  
Sep 10, 2014   #8
Leigh, unfortunately the rules of the forum do not allow us to share our email accounts with you. This is an open forum where all the uploaded essays are open to the registered forum participants. Instead of asking for our email accounts, you should just upload those papers here so that we can have an open discussion / suggestion table that can help you finalize your essay content. We can also verify your essay for plagiarism if you wish us to do that for you. This forum is equipped to handle such requests. Remember, we can only offer essay advice, we cannot do the work for you. If you need that kind of work, you should seek a professional writing service :-)


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