I have been given the wonderful opportunity to attend college as the first person in my family. For me this is one of the best achievements I am able to make happen in my life. My main reason to attend college is to pursue my higher education.
That first sentence is something a lot of students say. It is overused and not particularly convincing.
The last sentence above, about your purpose being to pursue higher education, does not mean anything at all! So... destroy that sentence!! :-) M
y main reason to attend college is to pursue my higher educationbreak into my intended career path... there have been many financial setbacks---These things are not specific enough.
I want you to start this essay by telling the reader something you want to do very badly... something you want to do in your chosen field. Come up with something to say you ARE GOING TO DO. That is how to begin the essay.
Tell what you want to do, who you want to help, etc. Then, tell the reader how your education will be with the scholarship and how it will be if you do not have the scholarship.
Be very specific!! :-)
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