Subject: Personal letter to Your English Instructor

Hello! My name is Kirstie David. I am fourteen years old and I was born on March,
9th, 1999 in Manila, Philippines. I came to Canada when I was 11 years old and I've
been living in Saskatoon for almost three years. I have two elder siblings named Alex and
Airese. I live with my father, Alexander and my mother, Teresita. I absolutely love dancing, acro
gymnastics and I've always enjoyed reading and playing volleyball.
I went to St. Marguerite School and my English teacher was Ms. Katelnikoff. She's pretty nice
and I think she really helped me improve my english and grammar. We did a novel study on
the book called " The Spirit Bear," and we also watched the movie. It was a really good book
and I loved it! I didn't really have any worse experience, but I really enjoyed her class.
My expectations this year is to improve my communication in world level language. I really
hope to become more confident in my English and be able to talk more fluently. I'm looking
forward to write more and to improve my grammar and strengthen my writing. I am hoping
to get to know my class really good, so performances will not be so "scary." I hope to learn as
much as I can in one semester and I will try my best to learn in this class.

I need help with editing and grammar! Thank you.

As per your topic it sounds that you need to write a letter to your English instructor.So, I feel it is good if your letter sounds a bit more formal because he is a teacher and not a friend. I wish you adopted a more a formal tone.


.... you are repeating your age twice here.
I was born on the 9th of March in 1999 in Manila, Philippines.