Hello to everyone, I'm applying to work in a foreign country, they asked me to write a Motivation Letter. As English is not my native language, I'm asking for your help in examination my letter.
This is my letter.
Name
address, 94/3/542
City, Country
01 September 2010
Dear Sir or Madam
I am a graduate student of XXXX University, City, Country. I have been looking for employment in a company involved in the field of Energy or Aviation due to the fact that it is my specialization. I have learnt a lot about Organization before, and this announcement has captured my attention. I would like to express my interest in a full time position as Repair Engineer.
I am specialist in Turbomachinery Power Engineering. My specialization: Aircraft Gas Turbine Engines. I am currently searching for an opportunity to start a career within large company. I possess with extensive knowledge in the field of Turbomachinery from the calculation and design to construction and testing. I speak English fluently. I am looking for a professional practice abroad. I am able to work alone or as a part of a team, and I like working with people. I am flexible and open minded, and if it is needed, I enjoy organizing different tasks. I am able to work hard, and I love the new challenges. I am also eager to learn new things. Also, I would like to learn new languages.
I would like to take part in the work abroad, because this is an excellent opportunity to improve my professional skills and to gain a lot of experiences. I was traveling a lot and spend a lot of time in a foreign countries, that wouldn't be new for me. I think, it would be a perfect start of my career, and I could build up good relationships in my profession, and personal life also. I expect that my educational background and interpersonal skills excellent match with your requirements. I would like to be part of a worldwide organization such as Organization.
Please see my CV for more details.
Thank you for your time and consideration.
Sincerely Yours, Name
Please comment my mistakes.
Thankyou.
I am a graduate student of XXXX University, City, Country. I have been looking for employment in a company involved in the field of Energy or Aviation due to the fact that it is my specialization. (add a brief sentence that mentions the nature of your training and experience.) I have learnt a lot about Organization before , and this announcement has captures my attention. I would like to express my interest in a full time position as Repair Engineer.
I am specialist in Turbomachinery Power Engineering. My specialization: Aircraft Gas Turbine Engines.--- I think this sentence should be the one added to the first paragraph after "that it is my specialization."
Then, para #2 starts like this:
I am currently searching for an ...
This needs a paragraph that discusses what you know of the company to which you are applying. It is very important to SHOW that you know a lot about the company.
This is very impressive, but add some material about the company and what it is about the company and the open position that make them perfect for you.
