razaina 1 / 1 Sep 9, 2012 #1Hi,I'm a french student, and I am actually a 2nd year Master's Student in Computer Security. I am writtng a cover letter, and I would like to get your opinion.Thank you in advance.-------------------------------Dear ----,I am actually a 2nd year Master's Student at the University of --------------. I'm seeking for a 4 or 6-months in-ternship as a compulsory part of my course and I would be most grateful if you can consider my applicationfor a placement in your company.During my Bachelor's degree, until now, I had the opportunity to work on a lot of projects as I had thechance to work with the ------------ team at ------- Labs.Either as an intern, or as an R&D technician, my experience with the ------ team involved in making researchand development in the area of --------- security. It also gave me the opportunity to co-write papers forInternational Conferences (SNDS 2012, DBSec12) and National Workshops (GDR SoC-SiP 2012, RodinUser and Developer Workshop 2012).My University curriculum, and my professional experiences, gradually made my interests in R&D in thefield of Embedded Systems Security and Cybersecurity.I derive satisfaction from doing good work on my own and enjoy the opportunity to focus on tasks andhave a can-do attitude. But I also thrive in a team and benefit from the interaction with colleagues in orderto be more productive and especially more creative and to learn from each other's experience.I would appreciate the opportunity to discuss available opportunities and provide further information.ank you for your time and consideration. I look forward to hear from you.
EF_Susan - / 2,364 12 Sep 24, 2012 #2HI Razafindralambo,I like the cover letter, it needs very little since the content is great but there are some things that could benefit from some small edits.I am actually...omit actually. you ARE a 2nd year etc. etc.as a compulsory part...omit compulsory. It makes it sound like you're only applying because you need to, not because you want to (which may be the case, but they don't need to know that :) )involved in making research...this can simply be "involved in research" etc. Try not to over complicate simple ideas, there are other places where things can be simplified down a bit as well.In your closing, you may want to change "opportunity" to something else so that it doesn't repeat itself. possibly restructure the paragraph to "I look forward to discussing available opportunities with you and can provide further information if needed. I thank you for your time and consideration." just an example, your call.Those are just a few small things that jumped out at me, like i said this is already very well done as is.Hope this helps!!
OP razaina 1 / 1 Sep 25, 2012 #3Hi Susan,Thank you for your advices !I will let you know about the follow-up.