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motivation letter (engineer in mechanical engineering)


mohamed22 1 / -  
Jul 28, 2009   #1
Dear Sir, Madam,

You have to look of engineer in mechanical engineering. Your announcer in the newspaper Quotidien at date 25th July is drew my attention and I have the honor to apply for this position.

I'm engineer in mechanical engineering, option energy, diploma from the University of Sidi Bel Abbes. I have an experience at the period of practical training in Sonatrach Company, about assembly and disassembly of centrifugal compressor gas.

I'm looking for some time an opportunity to speak on a larger scale, and offers ideas to consider my future in a positive way. I think your company can represent opportunity.

I'm pleased to join with you to achieve the objectives of this company and turn it into grand company of a competitor in the field of energy.

Since the presentation to the world of advertising, I has been my goal is to search for company in the field of energy, because it is field of my specialization, and I would like to gain experience in this field.

Thank you for your time and attention. I look forward to hearing from you soon.
EF_Sean 6 / 3,491  
Jul 28, 2009   #2
You have to look of engineer in mechanical engineering.

I have no idea what you mean here. I suspect that you could combine this with your next sentence, and say that "I am writing to apply for the position of mechanical engineer advertised in the July 25th edition of the Quotidien."

I'm looking for some time an opportunity to speak on a larger scale,

Um. You want to be an engineer so you can speak more?

Since the presentation to the world of advertising,

And now you are interested in advertising?

You need to focus more on what you have to offer the company as an engineer, and what you hope to accomplish in the position beyond generally gaining experience. Add specific details that will make you stand out from the crowd.
EF_Simone 2 / 1,986  
Jul 28, 2009   #3
I, too, find myself confused by this letter. What is the job for which you are applying, exactly? Other than outlining your degrees and experience, you should confine yourself to your ability to do that particular job.
kenziii 7 / 35  
Jul 28, 2009   #4
Upon reading this letter I began to wonder if English not your native language. Yup, your University is in Algeria. I'm rather confused on the entirety of the letter, but tried to alter it into a state of comprehension. I hope I didn't change any facts on accident!

To Whom It May Concern:

Your announcement in the Quotidian on July 25th drew my attention and I am pleased to have the opportunity to apply for this position.

I am a mechanical engineer with a degree in Option Energy and received my diploma from the University of Sidi Bel Abbes, Algeria. I have practical training experience with the Sonatrach Company, in the assembly and disassembly of centrifugal compressor gas.

I would enjoy an opportunity to speak to you at length and offer further ideas to consider my future in a positive way.

[[I think that in the above sentence you are trying to say that you would enjoy talking to this company more in order to convince them to employ you. You need to do that now, in this letter. ]]

I have been looking for employment in a company involved in the field of energy due to the fact that it is my specialization.

[[You probably don't want to say you want to gain experience in the field because you just said it is your specialty. What is your specialization?]]

Helping your company achieve its objectives as an employee and turn NAME OF COMPANY into a major competitor in the field of energy would be a pleasure.

Thank you for your time and consideration.

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