Please help with cover letter to a Screening Committee

I'm not great with punctuation. Please hell me out with that and any other problems that may be found in my cover letter below, thank you.


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Screening Committee
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Dear Screening Committee:

It is a delight to learn that Lary Community College is hiring a Network Support Specialist. My education and experience will allow me to be an effective and efficient tool in helping your organization maintain its excellence, as the largest grantor of associate degrees in Michigan.

I have taken computer repair, network support, project management, and management courses. Additionally, I have learned to install and maintain many different operating systems, including Microsoft Server 2003, Linux, and Microsoft Windows XP amongst others. I was also trained in the maintenance, and configuration of Cisco routers and switches.

Furthermore, my work experience has bestowed upon me many skills that can be a great benefit to your organization. For instance, I assisted my clients in expanding their knowledge of computers. Consequently, I have become a more effective communicator. My problem solving skills have been further developed; I can more easily use my knowledge to diagnose and resolve computer and network issues.

Although I have been able to describe some of my abilities, I can not state all of them in this letter or my resume. Therefore, I would greatly appreciate the opportunity for an interview with you. Thank you for your consideration.


Sincerely,


John Doe

Enclosure

I believe the term is "boilerplate." Your writing is decent enough, grammatically and stylistically, but everything you say is so standard and predictable as to be not worth reading. So, as I often advise people writing this sort of essay, deal more in specifics than in generalities.

"Furthermore, my work experience has bestowed upon me many skills that can be a great benefit to your organization"

Such as?

"For instance, I assisted my clients in expanding their knowledge of computers."

How?

"Consequently, I have become a more effective communicator"

In what way?

"My problem solving skills have been further developed;"

As evidenced by . . .

"I can more easily use my knowledge to diagnose and resolve computer and network issues."

Such as? And can you give an example?

Sean is right. Your letter is fine, as far as it goes. And, of course, you are not hoping to be hired for a job that requires writing, so you need not demonstrate especially creative writing skills. But, the things to do to make the letter more interesting are also the things to do to make yourself a more attractive candidate. By providing more details and examples, you make your claims of expertise more credible.

Thanks to both of you