Prompt: describe the environment you're raise, community, house, family etc and how it contributed to who you're.
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Agbado Ijaiye, a community commonly referred to as an outskirts of Lagos. The community has limited resources, no accessible public library, no well funded public school and academics enhancing programs. My school is either with no well equipped laboratory, no library for students to have access to academics materials and there is no reading room for students to study during leisure time.
( I was raised in...) Agbado Ijaiye, a community commonly referred to as an outskirts of Lagos. The community has limited resources.There is no accessible public library, no well funded public school, and (no) academics enhancing programs. My school is either with no well(does not have a) equipped laboratory, no library for students to have access to academics materials and there is not a reading room for students to study during leisure time.
Mos( Many) students growing in my community live on tales of trials, our accomplishment are bound with hope to get better. We have expereince d several trials and failures alongside sleepless nights. We do strive harder to achieve what students from a better (other) advantaged communities and schools are achieving.
The limited resources has made students from my schools and community developed (a) spirit of independence. For us, limited resource(s) does not mean we can not excell( excel) , no well( a low) equipped laboratory does not mean we cannot present our developed tools in Lagos state education district I, Agege exhibition. As for me, the limited resources did not mean I cannot win some JETs competitions. The limited resources did not mean I was not short listed among best(the) twelve in Lagos state ministry of education physics competition.
However, there are certain things we cannot achieve. Such as The Oluwole Awokoya Memorial Chemistry competition (and the) Cowbell Mathematics Competition. What chance do we have compared to those who have past question and other materials in their library? I can go to National Mathematical Commission Abuja Olympiad, with high competence in mathematics but what chance do I have against students that their(with a) school hired a special trainer for them(?)
The failures that I had endured due to the limited resources had contributed to shaping who I am today and had gave me my outmost objective, to stand as the pinnacle of hope for my community to have access to better resources, so that my neighbours, brothers, sisters and our future children can reach the peak of their career.( Love this ending)
Great essay! I see you are focused and well driven! You break up the paragraphs well in an organized manner. I helped with a few edits and suggestions, good luck!
