where is the..?

Where is?

Where is the justice?

Where is the peace?

Where is the freedom?

I went everywhere and looked for those
It took me years and years,
I found nothing.
I have no idea where those have gone….
Why do they want to keep them away from my people?
I do not know!
Who knows?!!
I went back to my country with two black bags full of money!!!!

Everybody was waiting for me,
They wanted me to say something,
I could not!!!!
I raised the two black bags
In that moment, every one knew what happened....
While all of them were shouting at me.
A little child stood and held up a stone in his hand and shouted
This is the justice
This is the peace
This is the way to the happiness.......... BILAL

Good, I think u wrote pretty well... I like that poem

thanks shy1. if you don't mind may u please read my other poem....thanks....

Punctuation can make it even better, but only if you like it:

I went everywhere and looked for those. ----> I added a period.


Semi-colon:
I raised the two black bags;
In that moment, every one knew what happened....

THANKS..

Where are you from? Is it not important? I think I could understand this poem much better if I knew some background information. I like it, though.

You can click on user name to see my other papers....

I think you can figure it out from the text. specially the end of it.