Senses poems: Birthdays, Summer in Yellow

I have writen 2 senses poems and i need help editing them. could somebody pick which one they like the best and help me to edit it to make it better

the example my teacher gave me is:
Birthdays
Birthdays are red, yellow, and orange
they sound like children laughing
they taste like sugary frosting
Birthdays smell like melting wax and blown out candles
they look like balloons and smiles
Birthdays make people feel special inside

the ones i wrote have no titles yet but i still need help.

Summer is yellow
It sounds like children splashing in water
It tastes like melting icecream
Summer smells like salt water
it looks like families having fun
Summer makes you feel happy

the other one i wrote is about winter

Winter is white and blue
it sounds like teeth chattering
it tastes like hot chocolate
Winter smells like Burning wood
it looks like families getting closer
Winter makes you feel warm and fuzzy inside

I personally prefer the summer poem. I like all of your metaphors, although "families having fun" is a bit vague. Try to come up with something more specific, such as families engaging in a particularly summery activity.

You might also revise your similes to make sure they all serve the unifying point in the last line. For instance, "teeth chattering" and "burning wood," while perfectly acceptable standalone sense imagery, do not particularly lead to feeling "warm and fuzzy inside." Your summer poem works better in this regard than the winter one, though I really like the notion of winter as a season that makes you feel warm inwardly, despite the outer cold.

Good point about the discordant imagery ... that's what was bothering me about the winter poem, now that I think about it.

thanks so much ill try to make them better. you guys really saved me because i couldnt figure out what was wrong and now i know :) thanks a bunch