SEGER 1 / 3 Oct 2, 2012 #1I am hereI wonder where HERE is?I heard of this place but,I see nothingI want to find something,I am hereI pretend it isI feel a distanceI touched the unrealI worry of the unknownI cried in my silenceI am hereI understand nothingI said to myselfI dream of challengeI try to reachI hope for compassionI am HERE!
Meiling 2 / 3 Oct 14, 2012 #2Overall, I do like your poem; however, I would personally add some figurative language to it and make it a little longer. Also, I feel a little disconnected with the line "I pretend it is." I really like the repetition and there is definitely an emotional tone coming from the poem!I hope this helps!
