aznpoo 7 / 23 Feb 21, 2007 #1Please proofread it, if it make sense or not. If I were to leave out the title will you still be able to figure out it is a suicide poetry?My suicide noteWhile I contemplate to live or not,The noose has already determined my fate.The night became much lonelier,As it disappear.Nevermore will I see a tomorrow,Nevermore will I touch your face,Nevermore will I ever feel pain.It was too late, I was in too deep.As I was grasping for air,My body drifted away.It was a sign from above,The process is complete.
EF_Team2 1 / 1,708 Feb 22, 2007 #2Greetings!Yes, definitely, I could tell it was suicide poetry (I hope for an assignment! :-)). Probably the biggest clue is "Nevermore will I see a tomorrow." That might even be just a little too direct; subtlety is good in poetry. I especially like the closing! Just a couple of edits:As it disappeared.As I was gasping for airVery nice!Thanks,Sarah, EssayForum.com