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"On this autumn day" - My concrete poem along with the description


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The poem is:
On this autumn day
I see the last maple leaf
Clinging on its branch

The wind is blowing
Try to send the maple leaf
Fluttering away

The leaf is stubborn.
Powerful as Hercules
It is enduring.

But one autumn day
It realized it should fall
To fertilize earth.

Harsh winter passes
The spring's aromatic scent
Fills the atmosphere

Last year's maple leaf
Was reminded why it fell:
To flourish new life

"The Last Leaf" is my concrete poem written in haiku format. The maple leaf is the main subject of this poem, therefore, the shape of a maple leaf outlines the concrete poem. It is told from a first person point of view because the speaker is the participant. The speaker, is observing the last maple leaf lingering on its branch despite the wind, "I see the last maple leaf/Clinging on its branch./The wind is blowing."
The tone of my poem would be phlegmatic because the speaker does not convey any emotions while she contemplates, for example, "The wind is blowing." She stated that the wind is has been blowing, but she does not give an opinion or any emotion about the wind. For instance, she does not say the angry wind or I hate the wind for trying to knock off the leaf. Furthermore, the mood was gloomy because it is set in the fall, "On this autumn day." Autumn has always been a depressing season to me because everything is bleak. For example, it rains, birds and other animal hibernate or migrate, trees lose their leaves, and everything becomes darker. It is not like winter where holiday spirit uplifts people's mood and the scenery is white with snow.
Some of the literary devices I used was repetition, "maple leaf" to focus the attention to the maple leaf from time to time. Hyperbole was also used, "Powerful as Hercules," to underline the leaf's consistency to hang on to the branch. That line is also a simile and an allusion because the leaf is compared to a Greek mythical hero, Hercules. He is an extremely strong man who was able to withstand hard tasks given by Greek gods so I thought the comparison between the leaf was appropriate because the small leaf was enduring the wind.
The theme of my poem is everything has a purpose. The maple leaf is trying to fight off the wind to stay onto the branch. After a few days it realized why it should fall—the mulch will give nutrients to the soil which will help bloom beautiful flowers in the spring, "Was reminded why it fell:/To flourish new life." The theme of my poem can be applied in everyday lives. To give an example, instead of living a cynical life complaining about all the "bad" things occurring in our lives, we be optimistic about believe that it happened to open new doors for us.

May 4, 2010, 08:14pm   #
I like your poem!

The speaker (no comma here) is observing the last maple leaf lingering on its branch despite the strength of the wind, ...

For instance, she does not say the angry wind or I hate the wind for trying to knock the leaf off the branch.

One of the literary devices I used was repetition, "maple leaf" to focus the attention on the maple leaf from time to time.

Hyperbole was also used, "Powerful as Hercules," to underline the leaf's consistency in hanging on to the branch.

The theme of my poem is that everything has a purpose.

The maple leaf is trying to fight off the wind to stay onto the branch.

After a few days it realized why it should fall—the mulch will give nutrients to the soil which will help beautiful flowers bloom in the spring, as in "Was reminded why it fell:/To flourish new life."

...complaining about all the "bad" things occurring in our lives, we should be optimistic about believing that they happened to open new doors for us.



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