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On Evil Genii - minds and virtues


giorgio186 9 / 54  
Mar 31, 2012   #1
I rewrote the concluding paragraph and put it after the first one. I also added something about virtues and a conclusion. Presently, I'm in high school. I'd like to apply for some British and American universities, next year. But at first, I must get a scholarship funding. So I have to send an application essay there.This my training for it. Then taking IELTS follows (I need at least 7.0 points). How do you see my chances? Please, be honest.

On Genii on Evil's Duty

The greatest minds are capable of the greatest vices as well as of the greatest virtues.

René Descartes

The status of genius is being nearly always ascribed to people standing on the 'Good Side'. But by what pattern do we presume they cannot be the evil ones? Why do we think that there is no man of Aristotle's intelligence, not willing to devote himself to science, and merely deceiving people to get their money, or confidence, instead? Do the evil genii exist? How can they endanger us? Is there any correlation between extraordinary abilities and goodness?

Honestly, I don't believe that character of a man evinces any connection with his intelligence at all. As the historical evidence proves, our world has experienced genii on both sides - good and evil; I have no reason to think otherwise. Evil genii exist. Their capabilities enable them to outwit other people using treacherous methods, which less insightful villains cannot use. I will demonstrate the impact of genii on each side as well as answer my opening questions more thoroughly in the following paragraphs.

A man doesn't become a nation's leader if he is not competent of ingenious acting. Regrettably, even Hitler was an exceptionally intelligent person. His thoughts, recorded in Mein Kampf, give us a deeper insight into his mind. We inquire that, once we free of all the racist insults included, some ideas appear to be formed by a brusque political thinker. No matter, what your conviction is, demanding bigger responsibility from politicians for their own decisions, would be an enhancement in government sphere. Hitler worked out many ideas, like the one mentioned, that cannot be objectively considered neither bad, nor silly. But he definitely personified an Evil in himself and his great thoughts were overwhelmed by the bestial ones.

Moreover, lots of insightful villains could be named in addition. Luckily, genial minds belong to the good side, too. Amongst those, many scientists, striving to improve peoples' lives, can be enumerated, as well as enlightened rulers, politicians and philosophers, whose efforts contribute to well-being of men. According to this, high intelligence seems to be regulated by Gaussian curve among good and bad people equally, which may sound a little negative. But as the amount of good people in the world is much larger than the quantity of others, the ratio of genii on both sides should follow the same rule.

Nevertheless, provided that good and evil genii seldom occur in the same era on both sides, one of the enemy sides often feels wronged. Environment always plays immensely important role in determining what way would the genius aim. We have to realise that the genius' fate is not firmly predestined; they can change their beliefs during life, they are being influenced by people around them; by many criteria, genii are similar to normal population.

They are capable - this is the key formulation. The greatest minds are more likely to be able of significant deeds. A lucid mind is greatly demanded means of achieving development and it's also the most dangerous weapon - constructing nuclear bombs, toxic gases and biological viruses. Dangerousness of a man grows with his psychical, abilities in a geometrical row if they are misused.

In contrast to this, many researchers dedicated their lives to the effort to improve the lives of others. For instance, take Marie Curie Sklodowska, a winner of Nobel Prize for Science and, who joined the army medical service during the First World War and exposed herself to radiation many times so as to help doctors examine their patients. She jeopardised her health to save people. Later, she died of radiation as a highly respected scientist and a virtuous heroine. The willingness to sacrifice herself for others made her an icon of science's merits.

Furthermore, a sort of solace may be sought in fact that there are some stupid people among bad. And the stupid ones often let themselves get caught while perpetrating a crime, which at least reduces the counts of bad side. Unfortunately merely by the stupid criminals.

In conclusion, I would like to emphasise that goodness of people is even harder to measure than their intelligence. Therefore we can never be sure what the real number of good and bad genii is. But it's easily presumable that the percentage is the same, as it works for all the features of character. Thus the war between Good and Evil lasts.

Thanks. I appreciate your help a lot.
chalumeau /  
Mar 31, 2012   #2
Extremely thought-provoking essay. I'll check the grammar in a little bit.
Initial thoughts:
- Your argument is sound, but you don't clearly state it until the end.
- Is there a way to combine the 1st and last paragraphs? Rewrite the two as the intro?
- Write another paragraph focusing on the virtues. What are they? How do we recognize them?
- Or, rewrite the paragraphs describing the virtues and vices of scientists as one paragraph.
- Write another conclusion

Is it true that for every person who does good, there is one who does bad? Does good produce bad and vice versa? Do people become better if they see evil? Do people become worse if they see good? There's no easy answer here.

What exam are you preparing for? TOEFL? IELTS? SAT? I will try to see how they grade the essay. Are you currently in college or high school?
chalumeau /  
Apr 1, 2012   #3
Here's the first couple of paragraphs. I don't have any experience with IELTS, but I think with a little help you aren't too far away. What a coincidence. I just watched a special on the Czech Republic yesterday! Your schools must have been good.



OP giorgio186 9 / 54  
Apr 2, 2012   #4
Thanks. I've rewritten it.
Our schools are not bad. But there are quite significant differences in the quality of teaching among them. I guess it's normal everywhere. I have the luck to study at a very good one. What have you learned about Czech Republic? Anything interesting?
chalumeau /  
Apr 2, 2012   #5
I learned about Olomouc and the plague monument--one of the largest plague monuments in Europe. Also, the astronomical clock was rebuilt after WWII in the communist tradition both preserving the saints names and communist leaders' birthdates on wheels turning around the central dial. The smelly Olomouc cheese is an aged cheese eaten with raw onion rings on a little baguette.

During WWII Terezin became a ghetto/holding cell for prisoners awaiting departure to Auschwitz or another concentration camp. The Nazis were so skilled at hiding the truth from inspectors that they boldly installed sinks with no running water! They made the showers to resemble the ones in Auschwitz. Every time I see a ghost town in Europe I shudder. It is the one terror that I cannot understand completely.

I remember seeing the thousands of hunting trophies and mounted animals of Emperor/ Archduke? Charles I, but I don't remember where?
OP giorgio186 9 / 54  
Apr 3, 2012   #6
Wow, you have learned quite a lot. I tried to look up those hunting trophies but I wasn't successful. So I can't help you with that. Sorry. Your knowledge about my country really surprised me; in a good sense, off course. Most of the people, even from countries next to mine, don't know that there is no Czechoslovakia anymore. So I'm happy to read what you've written.
chalumeau /  
Apr 3, 2012   #7
In high school I sat next to a girl from the Czech Republic my senior year--that was right
after Czechoslovakia disintegrated. In my experience, I felt that the exchange programs
should not have been an entire year. For the most part, I felt that the students were too
Americanized at the end of the year. Also, they were either used as babysitters or ignored
in a lot of ways.
OP giorgio186 9 / 54  
Apr 3, 2012   #8
Yes, if you are from Eastern Europe you have to be extremely assertive to break through in western countries. But there are few cases of famous Czech people in th US and I don;t mean just ice-hockey players. You may have heard about Milos Forman, a film director and also an Oscar winner. And recently, Bohdan Pomahac, a plastic surgeon, who has made a whole face transplant. So it is possible for Czechs to be respected abroad, however they must be very good in their field.

P. S.: I've just finished a new essay.
EF_Susan - / 2,364 12  
Apr 4, 2012   #9
Regrettably, IRONICALLY even Hitler was an exceptionally intelligent person.
His thoughts, recorded in Mein Kampf, give us a deeper insight into his mind. We inquire that, once we ARE free of all the racist insults included, some ideas appear to be formed by a brusque political thinker.

No matter, what your conviction is, demanding bigger MORE DEDICATED AND HONEST responsibility from politicians for their own decisions,

Moreover WITH THIS IDEA IN MIND, lots of insightful villains could be named in addition .

Furthermore, a sort of solace may be sought in fact that there are some stupid people among bad... NICELY PUT :)
And the stupid ones often let themselves get caught while perpetrating a crime, which at least reduces the counts of bad side.? PLEASE CLARIFY Unfortunately merely by the stupid criminals.

Thus the war between Good and Evil lasts. CONTINUES
I MADE SOME GRAMMATICAL REVISIONS AND SUGGEST YOU REVISE FOR CLARITY AND STRENGTHEN YOUR CLOSING STATEMENT A BIT


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