Dear,Ngoc
Thanks for your letter.I'am very happy to get it.I have just came back from Sapa.And now i will tell you about it which was a wonderful trip.
I could'n say you how excited i was before this trip.Because this was the frist time I had visted a famous moutainous in VietNam.Sapa is 500 km from my village.Desipe being exhausted after 4 hours ,I came to Sapa.Then,I together with my family checked into a local hotel and had lunch.The weather in Sapa was very cold and snowy and different from other where in VietNam.During the trek, we saw many things such as: local village,local market with clothing and handiwork which are very popular with many tourists.Sapa has not only fantastic sights but also delicious food.Fresh vegetables,many kinds of fruits such as : apples ,plum,etc are wonderful things which touris shouln't overlook
I think It is a fantastic place for everybody.The reasons above make i didn't want to leave.And until now ,Sapa is still the most exciting trip with me.Finally,Let's tell me about your last summer hoilday.Hope to here from you soon.
Take care,
Linh
Hey, Linh, always leave a space between the two sentences. I edited some parts of your letter. Hope it helps. It was an interesting letter and I think you could have write more about your trek, about people in the city. Whether they were friendly or cooperative. About beauty of the nature there, parks, gardens, or any thing you found more fascinating. It is not necessary to put these points too in the essay, it looks good even without it :)
Dear Ngoc,
I am delighted to see your letter. I have .....Sapa and it was a wonderful trip.
I could'n explain in better words how excited I (I have to be in capital always.) were before this trip. (After every sentence, you need to leave a space) This was the first time I visited a famous mountainous region in VietNam. Sapa is ... village. (SPACE) After 4 hours of journey, my family and I checked ...............different from other places in VietNam. During the trek, we explored local villages and markets for clothing and handiwork being popular with many tourists. Sapa .....has delicious .......such as apples, plum, etc are some of the wonderful delicacies the tourists cannot overlook.
I think it is a .....me. Do tell me about how you spent your last summer holidays. Hoping to hear from you soon.
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Hi Linh, WELCOME to the Essay Forum Family, I hope you find this website to answer your writing needs, we aim at providing you with the best help you can get from our team of experts, students and writers alike.
What I notice on your letter os the lack of formal words that you use, though I'm not sure if this essay is for a major subject or a letter to a friend, regardless though, you still need to make sure that you keep the formality of the letter. The fact that you are able to come up with this essay, only means that you are able to make it better.
I suggest you follow through with the corrections provided here on EF and in addition, be creative however be cautious at the same time.
The letter should remain professional regardless of it's purpose, this will definitely help you practice the English language better.
Keep writing.
