Hello,
I've made a motivation letter and I want know where I've made errors ?
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am currently an undergraduate student of Telecom Saint-Etienne at the University of Saint-Etienne. With this letter I would like to express my strong interest for participation at your Student Exchange Programme during your second semester of 2015.
I have principally studied Embarked Electronics, telecommunications and web development during my curses. After studying the courses on your website I have found a great selection that will be relevant for my interests. Indeed, I am very interesting by your formation "engenharia de teleinformatica". In consequence, your university is a very good opportunity for me to continue to improve in theses domains.
Another major reason for applying to studying in Fortaleza is the opportunity of improving my Portuguese skills. Indeed, I began the Portuguese language the last year. That gave me the occasion to discover a language and a culture that seem me very interesting. I would like in consequence, have the occasion to continue my learning of Portuguese in Fortaleza.
Finally, I think that studying abroad is about not only acquiring knowledge, but also about discovering new things. One of my desires is to meet different people of different nationalities, cultures, lifestyles, and points of view. The diversity will broaden my horizons and help me to become more involved in the global community. Studying abroad would be a significant life experience and, as we know, experience is the best teacher.
I hope a semester at the University of Fortaleza will help me grow personally and provide knowledge I will be able to use for future studies at my home institution, and in my job later.
Best regards,
- I am currently an undergraduate student of Telecom Saint-Etienne at the University of Saint-Etienne. ( be careful of word usage )
- With this letter I would like to express my strong interest for participationin participating at your Student Exchange Student Programme during yourthe second semester of 2015.
- I have principally studieda major in Embarked Electronics, telecommunications and web development during my curses.( "curses" is like an evil spell, i know you meant "courses" or your subjects but we better delete it)
- Indeed, I am very interestinginterested by your formation "engenharia de teleinformatica".
- In consequence, yourI believe the university is a very good opportunity for me to continue to improve in theses domainsfields .
- Another major reason for applying to studyingstudy in Fortaleza is the opportunity of improving my Portuguese skills.
- Indeed, I began the Portuguese language the last year.
- That gave me the occasionchance to discover a language and a culture that seem me very interesting.
- I would like in consequence, have the occasionhope to continue my learning of Portuguesestudies in Fortaleza.
- Finally, I think that studying abroad is about not only about acquiring knowledge, but also about discovering new things.
- I hope a semester at the University of Fortaleza will help me grow personally and provide knowledge I will be able to use for future studies at my home institution, and in my job later.University that will definitely shape my future.
So Franklin, I hope you consider my corrections above. Honestly, you still have to work on your english as a whole and practice writing more, post it here on EF so we can help you out. Further to your letter;
- proof read it before sending it out
- mind your word usage and spell check all the time
We wish you the best of luck and let us know what comes out of this application.
Cheers!!!
