minam 1 / 3 Aug 16, 2012 #18 August 2012Dear Hiring ManagerAddressI would like to express my interest in the Data entry clerk or and other available positions available at ____________________ advertised on ____________________.Not only am I highly computer literate and an excellent communicator both orally and in writing, I am diligent and able to multitask in a busy environment and exceed deadlines; hence I am confident that I am the perfect candidate for the job.I have attached my resume and would welcome an opportunity for an interview, and I thank you in advance for your time and review of my qualificationsSincerely... ...Joy JamesOK guys so im not really skilled at this wanted to keep it brief and simple so tell me what you guys think, thankss
Rena - / 2 Aug 16, 2012 #2It sounds good to me but maybe add some more personal information like where you went to schoolHope this helps
chessman567 5 / 170 11 Aug 16, 2012 #3perhaps it would be best to put "at your earliest convenience" at the end to show your politeness and courtesy. Maybe Sincerely yours, at the end, I don't know. Sincerely is okay too, I guess, but I like sincerely yours.The words in red mean that you have to add the phrases. but , I am also diligent and able to multitask in a busy environment and exceed deadlines (correlative conjuction: not only...but also)or and other -this part seems awkward. Revise.
geovlas 1 / 2 Aug 19, 2012 #4I believe the following:'...both orally and in writing, I am diligent and able to multitask in a busy environment and exceed deadlines; hence I am confident that I am the perfect candidate for the job.'would be better if put like this:'...both in oral and in written but I am also able to multitask in a busy environment in a diligent way while managing deadlines. I am therefore confident that I would be a perfect candidate for this job.'I think it is a bit more clear.