my first concern: what is the topic/prompt?
you say Miller tells...writes...writes...uses...uses...uses... :X
He writes about a group of girls who practice witchcraft and denies it by starting to blame innocent people.
Here it sounds like "He [Miller] writes ...and denies..." Make sure the parallel is between the correct subjects.
That interjection about page 102...is that crucial to the essay?
I believe you can combine that sentence about tone/metaphors/epiphanies with a previous sentence. by metaphor, do you mean allegory? it this was the thesis sentence, the ending half of the sentence is confusing. you have a chain of three verbs that I'm not sure what you mean.
to develop his perspective to present
would be sufficient, yes?
About topic sentences, what I do is either a transition or a short overarching analysis that you will prove in that paragraph: main idea/evidence/analysis/transition...repeat...
about incorporating tone into a play, I don't think one word succinctly explains the tone of their relationship. maybe the fact that this was a Puritan village and such words were condemned and it shows Proctor's feelings toward Abi...that can come in the center of that para...but make a more general topic sentence, then narrow down with evidence, and make it sufficiently analyzed so that you prove how Miller uses these techniques to show that perspective about truth and deceit.
That's a lot to talk about in the intro, but I'm guessing the prompt is something~ Evaluate how the author uses tone/metaphors/epiphany to develop his perspective on sins and truth.? <Random guess.