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"City park for the city !" Essay Topic


minhtung9x 2 / 6  
Oct 1, 2011   #1
Read the topic: U have bęn asked to suggest improvements to a park that you have visited. This might be a city park, a regional park, or a national park. What improvements would u make? Why?

My essay !
City park is a place where people usually go and relax. Where children, elderly are used to playing. Where staff, workers relax after a rainy day. Where flowers bloomed every season, there are now just weeds. But with the number of community members is bigger and bigger, it's too hard to satisfy with them. I want to repari this park and encourage community member use it.

The first improvement I would propose is view. We should make up and decorate new flowers and trees. With a nice view, community of member is more enjoyable and come more.

The second improvement I would propose is a big main gate. This mean we should create a big main gate to attract new member. If members of community visit the city park and see a big gate, they might get well-disposed and want to contribute more.

Last but not least, more car-park should be opened. If more and more member come to the city park, more and more car, bicycle will come. Image your car do not have any place to park, you will still be disappointed and probably feel uncomfortable after a busy day.

Repairing is the best way to improve a park. We should make it more comfortable and relaxable because park give us a sense of community.

Please Check and Repair . Thanksss
basawang 10 / 76  
Oct 1, 2011   #2
Hi soshianet,

I have one question.

"Relax" could be a verb.

Why do you replace "relax" with "feel relaxed" in the first sentence?
soshianet 16 / 47  
Oct 2, 2011   #3
Both of them are true, but I gave him a suggestion.
OP minhtung9x 2 / 6  
Oct 7, 2011   #4
Thank you Soshianet !!! Because there are many people so I want to repair and make it bigger :D


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