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Life succeeds in that, it seems to fail


Ultimate csp 2 / 6  
May 11, 2011   #1
Life has resilient nature, it never let hope to cut off even in the lurch. It arrives at specific conditioning through entertaining demands at variable intervals and in variable amounts and some times at discretion. This comes up with optimism. Optimism let one to crow over even in inauspicious conditions. In fact life do miracles in lurch conditions and turns the corner.

It triumphs, when there is no hope of its victory.

Traditional stories, which are being recounted by a man to a child, have the ultimate positive end. They implants in the flesh and blood that every bad and the worst have a well chosen end. And in actual the same comes about. A death bed patient, for an ordinary example, bears a charmed life. A stuck labor in a mine is rescued after a couple of days. These off and thens are the very reason that the hope dies but with the last breath.

If we dive deep in the history of world, we come up that every time when there was no way out but stars were in the ascendant. Subcontinent's fate in 17th century was hanging in balance. All India National Congress decided it in complete darkness. Germany, when it was quite at sea, found the hope in the shape of Hitler. USA was quite at its wit's end and was about to gave up all in vain after ten years war but it made a pile and turned the table by killing Osama.

On contrary there are many cases where felicity is left awaited and never comes. A pathetic poor man facing adverse economic situations, for instance, annihilates itself because he/she remains unable to discover light in future.

Over all, life is beautiful having optimistic nature and whenever it is being challenged it nails its color to the mast.
student7 5 / 14  
May 11, 2011   #2
it is a nice writing:)

here is my suggestion:

you can extend the last passage little longer
because using only one single sentence to close the whole passage may cause a widow paragraph,
which makes the ending dangling.
OP Ultimate csp 2 / 6  
May 12, 2011   #3
thanks a lot. Concern of you people is real help...
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
May 13, 2011   #4
Life has resilient nature, and it never lets hope get cut off, even in the lurch.--I changed this a little. It is still confusing, but quite poetic and intriguing.

It arrives at specific conditioning through entertaining demands at variable intervals and in variable amounts and some times at discretion. -------okay, this one is too complicated. I don't know what you mean!

This comes up with results in optimism. Optimism enables one to crow over even in inauspicious conditions.

In fact life do includes miracles in dire conditions and turns the corner.

It triumphs, when there is no hope of its victory.-----Life does not triumph. People triumph.

If we dive deep in the history of world, we come up discover that every time circumstances are dire, some people can persevere. ---Is this what you mean? I took a guess and tried to fix it.

A pathetic poor man facing adverse economic situations, for instance, annihilates itself loathes himself because he/she remains unable to discover light in future.

:-)
Okay... simplify, clarify, and write with shorter sentences.


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