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watching TV is an unhealthy pastime. what do you think about this statement?


thuong_lethi 4 / 9  
May 2, 2010   #1
Some people proclaim that they do not watch TV or do not let their children watch TV, as though it is just junk food for the mind. In contrast, others say that there are many benefits that watching TV can have. What do you think about this?

In my opinion, watching is the useful recreational activity for everybody, not except children. Watching television is beneficial in many respects. Firstly

The first benefit can be mentioned is that we can learn more explore more about different people and places. People get only limited opportunity to travel and explore World, due to their involments, which is required to live a life. The fact is that most people are limited in the amount of travel they can do. Moreover, TV help us to even explore those different parts of the World, where we can't even imagine that we would have visited. (what word is correct?) to "strange land", "around the world", and so on. Besides, we can get acquainted with (what word is correct?) a lot of films with multicultural characters on TV nowadays. In addition, there are a large number of TV shows which help to stimulate the brain and increase the intelligence by watching programs like "who is millionaire?", "arena with one hundred of opponents", or "road to the top of Olympia"... (I am not sure about name of those programs and I fear that this does not support for topic sentence about learning more about different people and places.)I think you are right and you should rewrite you essay eliminating this point.

Secondly, TV is one of the most ways to relieve stress. People who work in stressful situations environment need some sort of relaxation in their life, for which comedy shows are helpful and eventually makes person out of stress for atleast some time. In fact there are twenty hours comedy shows that available on TV. These comedy shows make people laugh that has been found helpful in increase blood circulation and lowering blood pressure. Many other diseases are also known to get cured because of this light and happy mood of the person. Apart from this while watching TV, whole family can gather together and discuss about their day today activities. I think TV is one of the good source of family time that is the most wonderful time with a person.

One can argue that watching TV much is harmful for children's eyes and there is too much violence on TV nowadays for them to watch. Those are true but those are as a result of watching TV improperly. This problem can be solved by enforcing certain strict rules such as , limiting time For TV (and other entertainment media), remove TV from a children's bedroom, encourage alternative entertainment such as reading, athletics, hobbies and creative play (according to Committee on Public Education, 2001). Parents should encourage their children to watch the right programs.

I believe that watching TV can bring us many benefits if we have control on ourselves. Watching by the right way is also a civilized way of live and we know we are civilized people. ^ ^You need to rewrite the closing sentence, this is poorly formed sentence.
vivien_wang 9 / 31  
May 2, 2010   #2
1. In my opinion, watching TV is thea useful recreational activity for everybody, not exceptand children are no exception .

2. The fact is that most people are limited into the amount of travel they can do.
Or, you may say "The fact is that most people have limited amount of time spared for travelling.
3.

In stead of that, TV let us go/visit (what word is correct?) to "strange land", "around the world", and so on.

I think neither of the words-- go, visit -- is appropriate, since TV can not acturally let you "go" or "visit" the particular place. I guess you want to express the feeling like this: Various TV programs provide us an access to know about the outside world.

4. Besides, we can meet/ see (what word is correct?) a lot of films with multicultural characters on TV nowadays.

5. In addition, there are a large number of TV shows that will help to stimulate the brain and increase the intelligence such as...

6. Ano ther benefit is that watching TV is one of the most useful ways to relieve stress.

7. In fact there are twenty hours comedy shows that are available on TV.

8. Also, most time watching TV is the time when the whole family can gather togetheraround and discuss livelytalk about life. I think that is the most wonderful time with a personfor a family .

9. One can argue that watching much TV is harmful forto children's eyes and there is too much violence on TV nowadays for them to watch .

10. Those are true but those are the results of watching not itTV is properly .

11. Parents should guide their children to watch the correct programmes early to createbuild healthy entertaining habits for them.

12. I believe that watching TV can bring us many benefits if we know how to control yourour favorites. Watching byin the right way is also a civilized way of livelife and we know we are civilized people.

You must be a huge fan of some TV programs, I guess:)
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
May 3, 2010   #3
Great corrections here!! I also have this advice for you:
Let this be paragraph 2:
The first benefit can be mentioned is that ...
Let this be paragraph 3:
Other benefit is that TV is one of the most ways to relieve stress.

GO BACK TO THE BEGINNING and write an introduction paragraph that tells about the statement and what you think of it. Write a whole paragraph to introduce this discussion before you give the sentences about the benefits.

:-)


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