With the understanding that the choice of academic school you indicated is not binding, explain why you are applying to that particular school of study. (2000 characters)
As I was filling out my course schedule for senior year, I had one hour left both semesters to fill up. At first, I thought I might just take this opportunity to catch a breather and take a free study hall which is essentially one hour less of school a day. But then my eyes wandered upon one AP Economics. "Why not?" I thought, since our economy is going into shambles and Social Security is falling apart, I might as well make some preparations for the future.
Science and mathematics have always come naturally to me. However, I decided to take an academic risk by taking AP Economics. Since then, economics has become my mind's third lover. After the first day of lecture, I already felt empowered through the knowledge that economics had given me through the basic principle of opportunity cost. As the semester wore on and we delved further into AP Microeconomics topics such as supply and demand, equilibrium, elasticity, and rational choice, I felt the world opening up to my mind. Even at home, homework for economics did not feel like homework, and reading a textbook was no longer a monotonous activity I dreaded every day. Now, after just being introduced economics this school year, I want to spend the rest of my life studying the intricacies surrounding society.
Rice has always been a university renowned for its economic studies, and I know that the only way I can solve problems in the economies of the world is through working, studying, and learning beside others who have a similar passion.
Comments would be appreciated!! Check on grammar and sentence structure too please! Thank you :)
I don't have a lot of feedback, this is a real solid essay that answers the prompt well. I'd stop worrying about it and submit.
Good luck with Rice
... It's been a couple of days... so... bump. Can I get a few more opinions please?
As I was filling out my course schedule for senior year, to fill both semesters. At first, I thought I might just use this opportunity to take a breather and schedule a free study hall essentially giving myself one hour less of school each day . But then my eyes found the class entitled AP Economics. "Why not?" I thought."Since the economy is in shambles and Social Security is falling apart, I might as well prepare for the future.
I knew that science and mathematics come naturally to me, but I was taking an academic risk by taking AP Economics. From that point on , economics has been my mind's third lover. After only the first day of lecture, I felt empowered by the knowledge of the basic principle of opportunity cost. As the semester wore on and we delved further into AP Microeconomics topics I felt the world opening up to my mind. Even outside of class , the homework did not feel like homework, and reading a textbook was no longer a monotonous activity. Now, after just being introduced economics this school year, I want to spend the rest of my life studying the intricacies surrounding society.**The previous sentence makes you seem rash and inexperienced. Perhaps reword it?**
Rice has always been a university renowned for its economic studies, and I know that the only way I can solve problems in the economies of the world is through working, studying, and learning beside others who have a similar passion.
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Overall, I think this is pretty good! I removed several pieces that were frivolous and cluttered up your work and corrected some diction that I felt was awkward, but, of course, that is all just my opinion as a reader. Good luck.
Thank you!!
