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Why Lehigh University + Equity and Community - Supplement


jsdginger 2 / 2  
Dec 10, 2009   #1
Hi, i'm really hoping to see what others think, so please post a comment, thanks.

Topics:
1)As you researched and visited colleges and universities, why did you decide to apply to Lehigh? Please give specific reasons. What contributions will you make during your time at Lehigh?

2)In our ever-changing society, people have defined 'equity' and 'community' in many different ways. How do you define these terms and what are the implications of equity and community for our 21st century society?

1) I currently live in the Dominican Republic, so I really didn't have the opportunity to visit colleges and universities in the United States. Fortunately I have Internet. My hunt for colleges has been going on for the past year trying to find one that suits me best. I've been able to see many universities and finally I got to the end of my search and settled for around 4 colleges, one of them being Lehigh University.

Lehigh really called my attention; actually it is my number one option. One of the things that I really like is the numerous majors offered due to the fact that I am applying undecided; I believe that this university will help tremendously in my final major decision.

If I were accepted to Lehigh University I would try to accomplish as many things possible and contribute to the things that I can, fiscally and spiritually. Also I would participate in many Lehigh community projects.

2) Equity and community are in some way related do to the fact that in every community there is equity. My definition of Community is that it refers to a group of people that share a determined space do to their having something in common. And Equity is pretty much the power that each person, separately, has to contribute to the community, which permits them to create great gestures in a society.

Now a day, many communities aren't as "powerful" as they were back then, due to the fact that there isn't a commune system to accomplish changes in any sector, city, etc. as strong as before. Many people have gained a sort of selfishness that says: "If I'm all right, why bother". That little phrase is what has deteriorated our individual equity, the wanting to do something, and the accomplishing a change so that others that don't posses certain things or privileges can do so. Well that little phrase isn't going to win me over.
zealzou 11 / 54  
Dec 10, 2009   #2
I like your essay~ especially the second one. It's interesting for schools to ask such questions...

Some suggestions~ I think for the first essays, you don't need to talk about so many things like "choosing a school, using the internet, 4 colleges". Maybe AO don't acre about how many colleges do you choose and you don't have to tell them so much. Also, many international students (like me) don't have the chance to visit the school. We all use internet, so I think it's unnecessary to mention that~

In addition, when you talk about what you can contribute to Lehigh, maybe you can get more specific. You statement (accomplish as many things possible and contribute to the things that I can, fiscally and spiritually) actually is rather vague and we feel difficult to vision what you will do for the university.

Just a suggestion~
hern255 13 / 48  
Dec 10, 2009   #3
"My hunt for colleges has been going on for the past year trying to find one that suits me best. I've been able to see many universities and finally I got to the end of my search and settled for around 4 colleges, being Lehigh University one of them".

That sounds better.
The last sentence in the first essay has a structure that makes it difficult to understand.
I agree with Baoguang Zhai's comment about that.

Regarding the second one, when I first read the word equity, I understood "the state of being impartial and fair", but you understood something different. However I might be wrong. Maybe someone else could say what it really refers to.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Dec 12, 2009   #4
Yes, with that first essay, think of student organizations you would like to join and improvements you would like to make. Think of humanitarian causes that are important to you. I think you should use this opportunity to let them know about your plan for the future.

What kind of contribution can be made by someone who is going into your chosen field? Present yourself as a motivated, passionate enthusiast dedicated to learning and making a difference.

Nowadays , many communities aren't as...
jamespotter_z7 2 / 17  
Dec 13, 2009   #5
your first essay is so general. I bet you can apply to 10 other schools and still use that same essay. Do more research. Find an activity, a program. You have to tell them something that only Lehigh has, and that something makes you want to go there.
bhan_msm 3 / 11  
Dec 16, 2009   #6
Even I m writing this essay.You should probably research more and include atleast two specific communities of the University and explain them a bit.If you need help in locating them,I can tell you.


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